I. Shrew
how much depends
on an apologetic
shrew
how much can you
say
how much can you
do
II. It's Complicated
airily, you said that
I had told you a lie
I have done no such thing
I said
you just rolled your eyes
III. Raindrops
raindrops are falling
on my head
they drip down
my hairline and
into my mouth and i
drink them up like
my favorite juice and i
smile because i
just tasted nature
as it was intended
maybe now i will be
more whole
Typed these up just now! I read all of y'all's lovely poetry and it got me inspired to write :) I hope you like them!
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Raindrops I love. :)
Raindrops I love. :)
"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson
Adore!!!
"Tots MaGoats Cra Cra Adores!" I say, like the commercial :P Seriously adore these! The rhythm of all three, and the wording... FAB! I really don't have a favorite, I love all three!
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!
Thanks, everybody!
Thanks, everybody!
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
:)
Echoing Sarah Bethany... I LOVED the third one! It was perfect. :)
I really liked It's
I really liked It's Complicated. That was probably my favorite. I practically broke the mouse (okay, I lied--it's a touchpad but it sounded good) clicking on these when I saw you had FINALLY POSTED AGAIN HORRAY!
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Hey! I friend requested you on FB, so wanted to let you know so it's not like a creepy person friend requested you.
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!
Cool! I was like 99.9\% sure
Cool! I was like 99.9\% sure it was you :)
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
:)
So I've been literally the worst at commenting lately, but here I am! I actually liked the first one the best, the rhythm and wording fit together so perfectly, and I could just feel it come together, like, feel the words drop off my tongue. The others were lovely as well. And I'm so glad you posted!!
The most astonishing thing about miracles is that they happen.
-G. K. Chesterton
Soooooo late at commenting....
I liked all three! Raindrops painted good imagery, so that was nice.
But I actually enjoyed It's Complicated, it's got lovely rhythm and the last line is perfect. Shrew is good too.
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
I LOVE...
...number three! That's just how I feel, about drinking nature and the juice and the wholeness! You encapsulated a feeling really well. :)