A Tribute To Orthodoxy - Part I

Submitted by Raen on Wed, 06/17/2009 - 19:44
Part One: In Which I Remember

...Heaven...

When I was a young girl, heaven was sitting on one of Saturn's rings, eating an ice cream cone. I could hear the choirs of angels while lying on a warm deck next to the swimming pool, watching the big dipper on a cool summer's night. Heaven was so big…but I could hardly call it lonely; every afternoon I would meet the King and Queen of Fairyland for tea. The prince would join us on occasion, and I dearly loved his company. He owned a priceless steed - a rocking horse by the name of Carver - and the prince would give me pears and sugar cookies to feed him with.

I lived next to a castle made out of amber, and in the morning sun it reminded me of the Seraphim at my Lady's coronation. In the castle there was a ballroom, but it was nothing compared to the one in my driveway. It was in that ballroom - my ballroom - that I first met the prince. We fell in love, of course, for how could it be otherwise?

Happiness reigned in my home. I planned meticulously for my house, spiritually, economically, and physically. Never have I seen (or will see, I suppose) a sturdier institution than the one I planned out with crayons and construction paper.

Author's age when written
19
Genre
Fiction
Tags
Heaven
fairytales
orthodoxy
G.K. Chesterton
Notes
This is my first bit of fiction since my lengthy sabbatical from any sort of pleasure writing. The title is a working title...I'm still not sure what I want to call it. Inspiration is taken mostly from Chesterton's "Orthodoxy" so if the whole chapter seems a little vague it may be because you have not read much Chesterton (or perhaps my writing is a great deal worse than I first perceived it to be). In any case, the whole plot should be a little more understandable once you read the second part. I hope to improve it someday, but as for now, I'm rather fond of it.
Thank you for reading. :)
Raen

Comments

LoriAnn

Wed, 06/17/2009 - 21:24

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Interesting writing, and very pretty. I don't know if I would call it orthodox though. Admittedly, I found it just a little strange.
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"I remember when trust went forth free
Sold for a smile on the face of a fantasy
Truth found a home in the pages of fairy-tales
Decadent words born from phrases in dreams that failed."

Raen

Wed, 06/17/2009 - 21:39

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Thank you LoriAnn for your comment, and I especially thank you for being so honest. Yes, it is a bit strange, but I think it may seem a little less strange when you read the second part (once I post it), along with the Chesterton quotations.

"The pen is mightier than the sword, and considerably easier to write with."

"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind."
— Dr. Seuss

"The pen is mightier than the sword, and considerably easier to write with."

Bridget

Fri, 06/19/2009 - 02:51

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There's only two parts to this? That's not fair! It's beautiful writing! I've never read Chesterton, though, so I couldn't say if it's similar or not.

"It is man's inherent nature to scare himself silly for no good reason." - Calvin and Hobbes

"I always wonder why birds stay in the same place when they can fly anywhere on the earth. Then I ask myself the same question." - Harun Yahya

Raen

Sun, 06/21/2009 - 01:19

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Thank you Bridget. :)
Oh! You should definitely read Chesterton. Start with his fictional works if that suits you best, but his essays are just as good. He is so eloquent and...hilarious.

"The pen is mightier than the sword, and considerably easier to write with."

"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind."
— Dr. Seuss

"The pen is mightier than the sword, and considerably easier to write with."