You are casually up against me
I know that's where my world lies
In those hands, decorated hands
Though it's less in your control than mine
Oh, tilt your head back, let me see them eyes
Oh, poor thing, you're running out of my time
And oh, I'll tilt mine, tilt it far to the side
And oh, poor you, they're all out of their mind
You are casually up against them
You know that's where their world lies
In those hands, decorated hands
You try your best but--
It's more in your control than mine
Okay. I be done after this for a while. :) Anyway, it's really hard to just not post, even though everything seems up in the air at the moment. Feedback? :) Thanks. -Homey
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Ah, but I must when I look on
Ah, but I must when I look on the homepage and see not one, not two, not THREE, but FOUR OF MY THINGS CROWDING OUT EVERYBODY ELSE'S. *shrinks into woodwork* Thank you! ;)
Noooooo!!!
If you stop posting I'm personally sending you a heated email telling you how good your writing is and how silly you are being!!!! Who cares if you have four posts up? We love them! You inspire us to write more!
This was interesting... Maybe you could give a bit of back story or secret author information out on this one, because I couldn't understand the actual story or meaning to it... But it fascinated me and made me agrivated because I didn't know the story!!! Love it... Sooo... What's he back story? What's the meaning?
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!
Haha! Aw, thank you! And, oh,
Haha! Aw, thank you! And, oh, I'll give the vague description: about how a person with higher power can use that against those around them, I guess. And how the people think it's in their control, but it's not, really. :D And anyway, that's the really VAGUE description! LOL!
I liked this, never mind what
I liked this, never mind what the meaning was. I think the rhythm is really good, don't YOU DARE STOP POSTING! ;)
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
Maybe everyone else just
Maybe everyone else just needs to post more. ;)
This was very interesting.
Loved this bit:
Oh, tilt your head back, let me see them eyes
Oh, poor thing, you're running out of my time
And oh, I'll tilt mine, tilt it far to the side
And oh, poor you, they're all out of their mind
And vague poetry can be fun, it's a stretch for the reader's imagination...there are so many ways it could go...
The most astonishing thing about miracles is that they happen.
-G. K. Chesterton
Don't not post! Anyway, this
Don't not post! Anyway, this had a really cool rhythm. :)
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond