This Side of Serenity [song]

Submitted by Madeline on Tue, 05/16/2017 - 03:26

Verse 1

I was dreaming of a land

to which I found a boat to sail away

You were there

The sea was grand, you held my hand

I sat up front and closed my eyes and felt

Wind in my hair

And you were there

And I was hoping for a smile

that set much later than the sinking sun

Not a care

And I’d have stood there for awhile

you looked so lovely in that golden light

No worse for wear

And you were there

So I said…

Chorus

Would you meet me on

This side of serenity x3

Would you meet me would

Would you meet me

Verse 2

The horizon spilled out like a perfect

Coastal promise that I’d find my way

Nothing compared

And you screamed at last you had a purpose

Blinking in the brilliance of a sky

Two heartbeats shared

Nothing compared x2

Chorus

Bridge

When we hit the shore

You know it’s gonna change things

That words often sound different

In the shade

And if we step on sand

I might not wear the same face

Marveling magnificence

Betrayed

But one thing I’ll remember as the same x2

You were there x3

Chorus

I promise that it’s better than you dream x3

Author's age when written
19
Genre
Poetry
Notes
Helllooooo! This is my original song I just finished up a few days ago! I've been wanting to share it and trying to get a recording I was happy with every night, but it's far from perfect. :P I was really pleased with this one lyrically, so I hope here is okay place to share. :) Feedback is always so appreciated! If you want to give the track a listen, here it is: https://soundcloud.com/madalenn/this-side-of-serenity-rough-cut

As I said, it's far from perfect! Thank you for listening if you do. <3

Comments

Madalyn Clare

Tue, 05/16/2017 - 23:39

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So I listened while I read and may I say you have a beautiful voice and, to top that, a beautiful song?
I really enjoyed the singer-songwriter cadence and lilt to it, and your use of alliteration and repetition aided to its story-telling (and also its peaceful imagery!). Glorious. *Cue applause*
Your tune, use of piano, lyrics, and voice remind me of a British singer-songwriter Gabrielle Aplin. If you haven't heard of her, I think that you'd enjoy her music, as yours reminds me so much of it.
All in all, it's a really well put together song with lovely imagery and tune.

Introverts unite!
Separately!
From the comfort of your own homes!

Sarah Bethany

Thu, 05/25/2017 - 12:07

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Forgot to tell you this became one of my "editing songs" for a couple days where I loop a song for a half hour or an hour, haha... Soooo beautiful. Your voice is like wooing honey.

Madeline

Sat, 05/27/2017 - 15:56

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Girls, you all are absolutely lovely!

Madalyn Clare--awwww, thank you! Your comment brought a smile and so much joy! <3 and THANK YOU! I looked up Gabrielle Aplin and that is SUCH a compliment. I must say, if you like her, have you listened to A Fine Frenzy? (name taken after Shakespeare, I believe...) She is absolutely one of my favorite singer-songwriters...her storytelling is phenomenal, especially in "One Cell in the Sea". You ought to look her up! Her real name is Alison Sudol and she has one of my favorite voices ever, and I feel like listening to her has really helped me.

Hannah--thank you so much!

Sarah--awwwwwwwwww you are wonderful!!! I always get excited when I see you've commented on anything of mine, ugh! It's like celebrity acknowledgement. hahaha!