I think it's funny that everyone is emerging from our holiday stupors to start posting again... :D This was incredibly enlivening. I could feel the movements and the thought processes. This opening line:

"Mistake I

I am familiar with the"

-- I didn't read as a Roman numeral but as a letter, so I thought you were doing a stuttering skip like a "mistake" and I liked that -- the "I" repeating. I wondered if that was intentional.

This:

"the bass in
his truck vibrates my
brain away the night is

alive"

ughhhh so good... You're the queen of line breaks, haha. It's like extra words, the way you use it to communicate emotion.

I like "collision and release" and "tick tock dance" (so creative).

And I thought "my favorite space has always been / before" was profound -- to talk about a space of time.

The moon glinting was a very concrete image and also made me feel emotions, just painting that solid picture.

And I could feel it -- the sparkling bubble -- when he wanted to know you, deep down.... when he could see your story, your progression from girl to woman. That's what I want, too: someone who knows my story. ^.^

And I like how you left the last line vague... though I assumed you meant diving into a relationship; I don't know. But I like that I don't know.

The only line I tripped over was this:

"Fresh I

haven’t felt the
butterflies in a minute

I am awake"

You haven't felt the butterflies in a minute, or in a minute you're awake? Just a grammar question. And maybe because I expected you to say something like "haven't felt them in a long time" - even though that's not as poetic, haha.

Thanks for sharing and Happy New Year to you, too!!