1. Primal Again
eyes scan
wide space and
I am back
on the savanna
where I hunted
as a cub
my knuckles
in the wet ground
roots poke my
weak peachy flesh
but soon, that human skin
is again calloused paw-pads
I am back,
I am a hunter
again
all fours,
primal, and throw
my head skyward
and I roar
like my father taught me
they know I am coming
they scatter, all of them
as I run, I charge
they are no match
for me
because the cub-me
has grown into
a lion.
2. Remember your mistake
you miss the peppermint
on her breath
and the July sparklers
reflecting off her glassy
brown irises
3. Car Radio
sometimes I
turn off my headlights
and sway
into my darkness
because maybe
it’s better this way
I can gently veer
off this path
and blame it
on faulty equipment.
Man, I haven't posted since November! Hope y'all like these. :)
Comments
Poem Number 2 sent an actual
Poem Number 2 sent an actual shiver down my spine.
Thanks, y'all!
Thanks, y'all!
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
Hey!
I haven't posted in an age, you're not alone....
Erin, I LOVE LOVE number two...oh its so short but I can't explain how much I actually liked it!
Car Radio ohhhh....wow.
Primal again...such a different thing coming from you! I think...it seemed like that when I read it! Amazing though, I can't put into words. Its so savage.
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
Thanks, Maddi!
Thanks, Maddi!
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
ERIN. THESE ARE AMAZING. Can
ERIN. THESE ARE AMAZING. Can I have your autograph?!?!
Primal Again - Oh MY was this good. It's gorgeous, and the language is so rich. It's a poem that reeks of wet earth--it just embodies all the sensations you're describing. I absolutely love the metaphor, and the way you ended brought a huge smile to my face. This is easily among your best work, if not the best you've ever written. Your imagery here is so eloquent and so extremely vivid. It was captivating!
Remember your mistake - Ugh, again, so good that it hurts. This is simple, and lovely, and bittersweet. It's wonderfully composed.
Car Radio - This is musical. It's captivating, and I can see everything you describe so clearly. I've actually been in a car driving with headlights off, and it's equal parts scary and soothing...haha. Kind of an odd combination. But this was wonderful work!