HI Guys!
Thoughts? Thanks!
-Homey :)
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Perhaps if I were
Easier to see
To touch
To know
Then I would have friends
Perhaps if I were
Nicer to you
To them
To him
Then I would not stand alone
Perhaps if I were
A bit prettier
Mascara
Lipstick
Then I would not be single
Perhaps if I were
To laugh when they tease me
Giggle
That's So True
Then I would smile more
Perhaps if I were
Less Awkward
Big ears
N-no stutter
Then I would be more popular
Perhaps if I were
Stronger a person
Standing here
Contemplating
Then I would not be doing this
Perhaps if I were
Not so afraid
Throw up
Hunger
Then I would be full
Perhaps if I were
Keen on being myself
Forget them
But what about me?
Then I would
be.
Comments
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I like this - and you make a very good point!
Thank you
Thank you both for your comments! :) I really appreciate it.
-Homey :D
Wonderful job!
Wonderful job!
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief
Oooh!
Love the description and image the poem reflected! Why were you using bold? That is the only thing that stood out to me (and I'm sure it's suppose to! Ha Ha!). I loved it!
Write on!
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!
Thank you both!
Thank you both!
@Kass--I used bold to emphasize key words to the peom. Basically, the things in each stanza I was talking about. :D They're also for a visiual effect. Thanks!
Thanks to everyone who commented!!
I love it!
I love the pattern, The rhythm it makes in your head is amazing! It has a great message too!
A poem begins as a lump in the thoat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness -Robert Frost
Emilee @ http://fantasticalpaperrealm.blogspot.com/
Thank you! :-)
Thank you very much! :-)
Love it!
The rhythm's really good, and... wow! I just love it! The idea with the bold thing, that's really awesome. Great job!
(just going through your profile here.)
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
That was really good. I could
That was really good. I could have done without the bold, but I see what you were doing, so it was still cool :D
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond