As our bodies float up to the sky,
And as we feel Heaven draw nigh,
We see the gates of gold,
The letters 'Heaven', clear and bold.
Yes, I know my name is there,
I know it as I float through the air,
And then I hear God saying loud and clear,
Welcome Child, welcome, have no fear.
The broken leg I had was't there,
I had not a care, not a care,
And God welcomed me in,
In where there was no sin.
I am finally with Jesus, my Savior,
And I knew it when I passed through the golden door,
I am in Heaven, I am home!
There, I see St. Paul from Rome.
Yes, I am in Heaven at last,
And my sorrow and pain is past,
All my sins are gone,
And I now walk on a golden lawn.
Thoughts anyone? :)
Comments
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This makes me think of a hymn. :)
Thank you, Lucy Anne and
Thank you, Lucy Anne and Kyleigh! I'll try to post as much as I can, although I'm quite busy lately...
Jesus Loves us all!!
I liked this, good job! :)
I liked this, good job! :)
Proverbs 3:5-6
Trust in the Lord with all thine heart, and lean not unto thine own understanding.
In all thy ways acknowledge him and he shall direct thy paths
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This is very pretty :) Like
This is very pretty :) Like Kyleigh said, it does have the feel of an old hymn. However, I think the 'There I see St. Paul from Rome' part doesn't quite fit. Perhaps it could be, "I am in Heaven, I am home!" and then "My days are done, no more I'll roam" or something like that. But overall, a very nice poem! Cheers!
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Mon, 04/23/2012 - 19:13
In reply to This is very pretty :) Like by Laura Elizabeth
I agree with Laura, but since
I agree with Laura, but since I'm not good at poems I thought I'd better keep my mouth closed...:D
Proverbs 3:5-6
Trust in the Lord with all thine heart, and lean not unto thine own understanding.
In all thy ways acknowledge him and he shall direct thy paths
P.S
Go to my blog and follow it: Sarahanneandrews.wordpress.com
:) for my sake, follow
Mon, 04/23/2012 - 19:29
In reply to I agree with Laura, but since by Sarah Anne
Thank you, Laura and Sarah :)
Thank you, Laura and Sarah :) Yes, Laura. That would fit better :)
Sarah: No, you could have told me it didn't fit :D
Jesus Loves us all!!
Hi!
I loved the rythme! It was fantastic and very beautiful. I hope your story is published soon, I cant wait to read it.
WELCOME TO AP!
Loved it!
Thanks for reading my story ;-)
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Write On!
I like it (especially the
I like it (especially the part about walking on a golden lawn) !
Yes, all our sins and sorrows will be gone when we go there :)
"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson