~For the Theme of Spring, a Mysterious Jar
You’re spinning by
Too fast for me to hold you
My arms are reaching, my hands are grasping
You’re passing me by my fingertips
You are glowing,
Glowing like the moon is within your skin
You laugh and pass me by
Like mist in the hills
There mist lays white-brushed clouds
Yet it’s unreachable
Your wings are silver
Glimmering like a fish’s tail
The wind is carrying you swiftly by
You said you would wait for me
Wait for me on the moon
You are dancing
Too nimble for me to follow you
Perhaps this is all a dream
‘Till morning sunders
Your dress is like mail
Shimmering like silk
Shining like pearl
You say the moon is calling
The boat has opened its sails
Yet wait as a shadow falls
Crossing the starlit path
Where no wind blew, to move the branches
To pass a shadow on moon’s face
You dance like a flame
Then lid and glass
Sweep over you
You are wrapped up like a star in dawn
Which wracks the sky in mystery
Asunder it blows
Like a horn in the mist
Like a firefly in a pit
Comments
I echo what Aredhel said.
Enchantingly beautiful, intriguingly mysterious. It leaves you feeling like you've just awakened from a beautiful dream that you can't quite remember...
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Brother: Your character should drive a motorcycle.
Me: He can't. He's in the wilderness.
Brother: Then make it a four-wheel-drive motorcycle!
I love this.
It's beautiful and dizzying and captivating all at the same time.
There really should be more
There really should be more writing like this out there in the published world.
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
Lovely! The rhyme pattern was
Lovely! The rhyme pattern was inspiring and beautiful : )
Awesome
OK, well, I started writing out this comment with some of my favorite lines from this poem... But there were so many I was practically copying in the whole thing! It is all very poetic. Love this, love the dream-like quality. It made me think somewhat of fairies, but I also really like the underlying tone of something slipping by...
You're really maturing as a poet and a writer. That is awesome to see.
Hi Bernadette
The poem and the words are truly touching and amazing!!
Surya
Please take me away... :)
Please take me away...
:)
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief
Magnificent.....
Absolutely beautiful! I loved it!
Wow.
This poem was amazing. It was so beautiful that I had to read it aloud. It felt magical to me, and certainly mysterious. The ending felt sad to me, but in a way that was what made it a great poem.