Shadows, shadows, all around,
In the sky and on the ground.
Light has fled on this dark day;
Evil's minions come to play!
Darkness, darkness, in the air;
Stars are hiding, who knows where?
Sun has gone and run away
And we're left with night today!
Weapon, weapon, in my hand,
Let us fight to free this land.
Cleanse the shadows with the light;
Bring back all that's good and right:
Warrior, warrior, come with me,
Let us make this great land free.
Bring your sword and bring your heart;
Pray for strength to do your part!
Child, child, will you search?
Find for me a sunbeam's perch.
Seek the stars, so fair and bright;
Bid them come to set things right!
Maiden, maiden, flower fair,
Do not fear the giant's lair.
Dark and dank his dungeons be,
Yet you'll find that there you're free!
Peasant, peasant, toiling hard,
Though your body may be marred,
Strong protector is your task;
Do not hide behind your mask!
Evil, evil, can you stand
When you're faced with this great band?
Come and try them if you dare;
We shall see how you will fare!
Comments
AMAZING. this is a novel in
AMAZING. this is a novel in the making, I hope you know...
Thanks!
@eirian: That probably depends on what you mean by "like it." :D
@LoriAnn: Oh, yeah. I don't have a novel for it yet, but that thought has occured to me from time to time.
Weellll....
How about....more cool poetry???
Um..it's a very interesting
Um..it's a very interesting poem, but the stanzas don't maintain a consistance tone. The first stanza, for example
Shadows, shadows, all around,
In the sky and on the ground.
Light has fled on this dark day;
Evil's minions come to play!
Is more playful, while
Peasant, peasant, toiling hard,
Though your body may be marred,
Strong protector is your task;
Do not hide behind your mask!
Is a call to action. It's a very good beginning, though
Formerly Kestrel
Hmm
@eirian: We'll see...I don't write a lot of poetry.
@Kestrel: I hadn't thought about that before...thanks.
I like this poem a lot. I
I like this poem a lot.
I find that the change in tone suits the situation. They are confident, but they are aware of the danger. There are some absolutely beautiful lines in this. Such lovely images:
Stars are hiding, who knows where?
Cleanse the shadows with the light...
Bring your sword and bring your heart...
Simple, yet deep. Light, but rich.
Very good.
Well done, Leandra! LoriAnn
Well done, Leandra! LoriAnn is right, this is a novel in the making!
@Kestrel, you're right, but I think that since each stanza is specific to a thing/person, the tone can change. Obviously my opinion of poetry is extremely free-form, though. :0)
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And now our hearts will beat in time/You say I am yours and you are mine...
Michelle Tumes, "There Goes My Love"
Wow!!!
This is a great poem! Can you do more stuff like it?? :) :>