with every drop, even the sweat
over every skin cell, even the freckles
on every finger, even the pointers
with every word, even the warnings
for every look, even the glares
with every gift, even the wasted
inside every box, even the empty
hid in every room, even the locked
with every tear, even the rips
on every page, even the dog-eared
with every wound, even the open
showing every heartbeat, even the broken
pumping every breath, even the last
trust me and I will love you
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Wow, Anna. This is one of
Wow, Anna. This is one of your best yet. This has so much emotion in it. I love how...ugh...I can't think of the correct words! LOL! But how you listed things that are imperfect and made them beautiful! Good job.
I love this. It is a really
I love this. It is a really beautiful poem, Anna. I especially love how you started and ended it. it is such a simple poem, yet hold so much meaning. I love it! :)
See him with his books:
Tree beside the brooks,
Drinking at the root
Till the branch bear fruit.
See him with his pen:
Written line, and then,
Better thought preferred,
Deep from in the Word.
~John Piper
Give me a moment to emerge
Give me a moment to emerge from my trance...
I really, really like this. Somehow, to me, it's like talking and like a song at the same time. And the mirroring of so many lines. The simplicity. Quite good. :)
:)
'Tis a beautiful poem, Anna. I love how you described it in the middle and how you wrapped it up by reversing the first stanza. It reminds me of God, in some way--on how much He loves us. 'Tis so beautiful, great job! I could never write something like this so well. So simple, but message strikes.
p.s. When do you think you will be able to write more Out of Time? Or what do you plan to do now that we all voted on your blog? I think that even though I voted that I think you should rewrite it and then bring it all back, I think you should follow what you want to do. I just want more; I don't really mind in which way it's brought back.
"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson
I'm trying to think of
I'm trying to think of something to say other than "I love this; this is great!" but I can't. I feel like I could have read this in the greatest poems of the year book. :) Very meaningful.
"trust me and I will love you"
"with every gift, even the wasted
inside every box, even the empty
hid in every room, even the locked"
Those are the best bits, I reckon.
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
Hello, my friends.
I wish I'd been able to reply to you all sooner, but I just want to let you know that I loved reading your comments on this piece. You've encouraged me greatly after the recent feeling that I couldn't turn out any good writing.
@Lucy Anne: I think I'll go with the top result on the poll. It seems better to me to get the whole thing worked out. Just keep reminding me to write it!
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief
To Remind You
Well, here I am--reminding you! Four days ago is a month....hope you are working on it....... :)
"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson
Very powerful!
Very powerful!
I don't know how I missed
I don't know how I missed this from 2 years ago, haha. This is lovely.
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
:)
This is absolutely gorgeous!
A poem begins as a lump in the thoat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness -Robert Frost
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