hello... how do you do? you finally made it.. good for you.
this is a dream. and as you can see... we've made it be anything you want it to be.
you can go fly, go recolor the sky. this place was made behind the human eye.
this is a dream with a magical theme, and it lives for your wholesome delight.
adventure and sleep now combine in the deep where you live almost every night.
hello... come look at this. we've created things that don't normally exist.
the entire land painted by angelic hands. time doesn't matter so pour out that sand.
these are a few of the gifts made for you. use them well till the dream is through.
this is a dream with a magical theme, and it lives for your wholesome delight.
adventure and sleep now combine in the deep where you live almost every night.
this is a place far from planets in space, and the only light shines from our LORD's holy face. as soon as you wake, all of this will erase, and you'll live with a memory of grace
life would be dull and your life would drag on, were it not for all mem'ries and dreams.
we ask you to remember all is not as it seems. welcome, to the end of the dream.
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thank you
thanks, i like it too. i wrote it as a song. but it works as a poem
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Hey...welcome to AP!
I didn't know you were so good at writing poetry! Good job!
yup
thanks. i didn't know you were so good at writing stories.
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Reminds me of Inception.....
I love it. :)
Mon, 06/06/2011 - 19:18
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thank you
maybe a little inceptionish.
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Cool
This makes me think of my planet; without it my life would be dull and my life would drag on were it not for all mem'ries and dreams. My planet is almost exactly as you descibe this place in your poem. Thanks. :)
Love it!
Love the message and feeling it carries... well done!
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!
Good job!
"this is a dream with a magical theme, and it lives for your wholesome delight.adventure and sleep now combine in the deep where you live almost every night."
This line is lovely. :) I love how it becomes the refrain for the poem. The cadance is fun to. I write poems where there are those repeating rhymes in each line (e.g. Sky, fly, eye in line 3) I love that.
Very good job! Thank you for sharing it.