The Beginning of Eternity

Submitted by Wings of Eternity on Sat, 04/04/2015 - 21:56

The bells are tolling,
but I do not hear their sound.
I am caught up in something
so much more profound.

I see women weeping
with men of solemn face,
but I do not feel as they do,
wrapped in arms of grace.

A whispered silence falls,
like the heads of those that bow,
but oh, if they could only see
the rejoicing around me now!

They would hear a mighty chorus
and the dazzling colors see.
Then they too would rejoice,
for death is only the beginning of eternity.

Author's age when written
26
Genre
Poetry
Tags
God
love
death
Heaven
joy
Sorrow
eternity

Comments

Heidi

Mon, 04/06/2015 - 16:43

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This is absolutely brilliant! I love the rhythm of the words. They flow so beautifully. And yet the message/the meaning of what you are saying is clear and easy to grasp. :-)

E

Mon, 04/06/2015 - 18:02

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This is lovely. I loved the images and how it was composed. One thing I would do is take out the exclamation mark at the end of the last line. However, I have a pet peeve about exclamation marks in fiction/poetry when they are used outside of dialogue, so that's a personal decision. Great job!

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Wings of Eternity

Thu, 04/23/2015 - 16:19

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Thanks Erin for the comment about the exclamation mark. I believe you are quite right about it and I have changed it. Thanks again!

"Be an example to all believers in what you say, in the way you live, in your love, your faith, and your purity." 1 Timothy 4:12

Kyleigh

Tue, 04/07/2015 - 17:37

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This is beautiful - beautiful thoughts put into beautiful words.
"O death, where is thy sting?"

Wings of Eternity

Thu, 04/23/2015 - 16:20

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Thank you for the lovely comment!

"Be an example to all believers in what you say, in the way you live, in your love, your faith, and your purity." 1 Timothy 4:12