I'm not much of a poet, but I really felt like writing poetry. Hope you like it.
I stand here, all alone,
With darkness all around.
Yet even in this nothingness
I hear a little sound.
I hear you whisper in my ears,
I hear you laugh, I hear you cry.
A feeling wells inside my heart
That nothing can describe.
I feel Death coming nearer;
I don't know what to do.
And in that very second,
I know that I need you.
A tear falls from my eye;
I feel your presence near.
Your face is shining bright
In its perfect, Crystal mirror.
A flash of shining light;
I turn and see your face.
And Death, the skulking monster
forever leaves this place.
And as I look upon you,
Into your pale-blue eyes,
Again, that feeling fills my heart
That nothing can describe.
You take my hand, and pull me up;
My life is whole again.
You lead me from that evil place
To feel the summer wind.
You heal the heart once broken;
You alone can make me smile.
And now I feel that happiness
Will fill me for a while.
Our journey nears its end,
Although it may be sad.
The tears flow from your face,
As the blood flows from my side.
You hold my hand so tightly,
I can hardly feel the pain.
And I begin to realize
My days are at their wane.
And as my life is fading,
I look into your eyes.
Please, never forget you've given me
What Nothing Can Describe - Love.
Please let me know if there are any mistakes or corrections to be made. :)
Comments
Thanks Erin!
I think I will write more poetry soon!
"Even if the sun crashes into earth, I won't let go, I won't let go. I can be your light, stay with me tonight, I won't let go, I won't let go."
Good.
Why can you write poetry, and I can't? :P
"My greatest wish for my writing is that it would point you to the Savior."
Thanks!
You can
"Even if the sun crashes into earth, I won't let go, I won't let go. I can be your light, stay with me tonight, I won't let go, I won't let go."
This is the best ever I've
This is the best ever I've seen from you, Susannah!! Great job! I love everything about this!
"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson
Thank you sooo much!
I really enjoyed writing this. I'm glad to know you like it!
"Even if the sun crashes into earth, I won't let go, I won't let go. I can be your light, stay with me tonight, I won't let go, I won't let go."
:)
I really liked this! And it serves as a great companion to your story. It doesn't give away too much, but it piques interest. Keep writing!
The most astonishing thing about miracles is that they happen.
-G. K. Chesterton
Thanks Little Woman!
I'm glad you liked my poem. That's good that it doesn't give too much away.
"Even if the sun crashes into earth, I won't let go, I won't let go. I can be your light, stay with me tonight, I won't let go, I won't let go."
WHOA, whoa.
This was intense! And the story so far (of what I've read, chapter 1&2) is really good...it's so interesting. And I agree with Erin and Lucy, you can put more personality with the characters and explain more of their lives not in their dialogue. I think Erin and Lucy Anne explained that better and I'm not much of a critique-r. :)
And thanks so much for your comment! (on my essay thingo) It flattered me...thanks heaps. So now I'm off to read the rest of your story! It is a really good hooker so far.
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
Thanks!
Thanks allot Maddi! I love it when people comment on my writing. :)
"Even if the sun crashes into earth, I won't let go, I won't let go. I can be your light, stay with me tonight, I won't let go, I won't let go."
That was intense! You should
That was intense! You should write poetry more often-I really enjoyed this.
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond