SIREN
Rises from the ocean
Wet hair shining, black;
Skin pale, white;
Calling, beckoning,
"Come, come hither."
Stop the ears, close the eyes,
Deaden the heart
To her fatal song.
Set the sail; away, away.
Do not pass her by.
Comments
Love it!
Your wording is splendid! A very enjoyable poem indeed, masterfully vivid!
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!
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Ooh, mermaids! This caught me from the start. I like the theme behind it too.
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
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This was striking. Sort of minimalistic, and yet it threw an entire scene together in my mind, which is awesome. Good job!
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Brother: Your character should drive a motorcycle.
Me: He can't. He's in the wilderness.
Brother: Then make it a four-wheel-drive motorcycle!
Ooh. This was really vivid
Ooh. This was really vivid and reminded me of old myths. I love the feel this had.