How Far We've Come

Submitted by Tamerah on Tue, 08/12/2008 - 21:52

Words misconstrued as they find themselves spoken
Sentences, phrases, they leave our lips broken
Memories sleep and are never awoken
If they open their eyes, cover them, cloak them.
The city lights mock the stars in the sky
And the good disappear behind enemy lines
Convinced we are better, convinced by our lies
We sit back and watch while everything dies.
Fill our lungs with fire and let ourselves burn
The smoke climbs higher and we never learn
Turning to ash, we’re never concerned
And as we grow older we all get our turn.
An infectious disease eats us out of our homes
But haven’t we always said that we’re best on our own?
Our fears stand by till night leaves us alone
Then they take shape, and we hate what they know.
The dust in the air leaves it hardly worth breathing
Reality shows us we’re better off dreaming
Runaway from our problems, it’s easier retreating
Let’s just close our eyes and pretend we’re not bleeding.

Author's age when written
16
Genre
Poetry
Notes

It's a bit of a mess...

Comments

Anna

Tue, 08/12/2008 - 22:26

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I'll be honest, I'm not sure exactly what it means. But I liked the rhythm of it.

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Anonymous

Wed, 08/13/2008 - 13:38

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I think it's a go green, save our planet type thing...but I really like it!
Runaway from our problems/it’s easier retreating/Let’s just close our eyes and pretend we’re not bleeding.
That line is beautiful, Tam, and nice way to finish it! =]

Anonymous

Wed, 08/13/2008 - 13:38

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I think it's a go green, save our planet type thing...but I really like it!
Runaway from our problems/it’s easier retreating/Let’s just close our eyes and pretend we’re not bleeding.
That line is beautiful, Tam, and nice way to finish it! =]

Jenny

Wed, 08/13/2008 - 18:05

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I love the rhythm in this one Tam... I think it has to do with sin - how it impacts us as a society and individually... Everything from the need to take care of creation to the need to take care of our souls...

I have to agree with one of the other comments - the last two lines are a wonderful way to end it -
"Runaway from our problems, it's easier retreating
Let's just close our eyes and pretend we're not bleeding."

Two Thumbs Up!

marie (not verified)

Thu, 08/14/2008 - 14:23

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If your poem has to do with sin, then that was very true, I loved the way the last line ended "Pretend we're not bleeding" that was beautiful.

Tamerah

Sat, 08/16/2008 - 07:29

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I was going to try and explain it, but I asked Jenny to read it over and say what she thought it meant in her comment, she's much more concise than I am. Anyway I'm glad that you like it =]

Anonymous (not verified)

Tue, 08/19/2008 - 01:38

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Dude this was a freaking amazing poem. I think it's good enough to be published. You need to send it in a letter to yourself so that it can't be plagiarized. It's a really deep poem that can be taken to mean several different things, which is great because that means more people can relate to it. Kudos.

Tamerah

Thu, 08/21/2008 - 07:26

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Thanks Steph, and everyone else! I worked on this poem for a long time, longer than I have any other poem, so I'm glad you all liked it =]

Velocity

Fri, 10/10/2008 - 15:11

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wow Good Job Tam!!!!

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