Bravo! The hero saunters down the busy street
Confident in righteousness, upbeat
Defending the peers of the realm
The monster vanquished, good upheld
His bearing noble, the colors bright
He presents the crowd with quite a sight
Smug smile, upturned nose
Bright eyes, cheeks apple and rose
Cape confidently breezing
But people shove past, unseeing
Surprised he looks at the crowd
Thinks he “What fools, to not know
Danger without their savior?”
Captain courageous, laughed off-stage
Cheeks left in the brightest rage
Eyes in tragic blue, leaking
Superhero cape, weeping
Perhaps in the end
He will define himself by this moment
But right now, his heart bowed
The hero walks trembling home
Curled up in bed with yesterday’s toys
The girl sits bitterly railing her choice
She longs to believe the hero
Romance dances in her heart
But her eyes did not see the danger
So she is left in sorrow and anger
Will the hero be lost forever?
Perhaps in the end
She will define herself by the moment
But right now, her heart bowed
As the hero walks trembling home
Comments
Hmm. I'm still
Hmm.
I'm still unsure.
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He who is near to his Captain is sure to be a target for the archers.
-Amy Carmichael
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief
This is great!!!
This is great!!!
I like how it makes the reader have to look the poem over closely to get the right meaning; I think I got it now. :D
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"Elves and Dragons! Cabbages and potatoes are better for me and you. Don't go getting mixed up in the business of your betters, or you'll land in trouble too big for you." — Hamfast Gamgee (the Gaffer)
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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]
Well...
Well...at the moment I have to agree with Anna, but I think once I have time to think about it a bit more it will come together.
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"Let the high praises of God be in their mouths, and a two-edged sword in their hand."
~Psalm 149:6
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Brother: Your character should drive a motorcycle.
Me: He can't. He's in the wilderness.
Brother: Then make it a four-wheel-drive motorcycle!
Wow, you guys comment fast!
Wow, you guys comment fast! I'm glad I've made you think, lol! I hope you get some meaning on your own from poetry - it doesn't have to be what the writer intends, but rather how you interpret it.
For those who would like a hint at what I was thinking (which is what I personally would like, if I hadn't written it!)
First, I had just watched the Incredibles and Sky High on the disney channel over winter break. I was thinking about how sad it is that as we get older we see only what we expect to see. What if superman really did show up tomorrow? Would anyone notice? Would people laugh? Would anyone care if he saved us from a threat we couldn't perceive? Very Don Quixote.
To me, this thought strikes eerily close to ideas of personal faith, so I linked the ideas with an image that has often stayed with me. One is supposed to have faith like a child, but what happens when the child loses faith? And who loses the most - the "hero" or the child who no longer believes?
BUT! More important than my intentions were when writing it was what you got out of it. Did some of the meaning come through? Did the poem bring to mind ideas unrelated to my own intentions? I'd love to hear more on what you all think...
OK
Oh, okay, I've got it now. Good job!
Actually, now that I get what you're saying I really like it!
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"Let the high praises of God be in their mouths, and a two-edged sword in their hand."
~Psalm 149:6
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Brother: Your character should drive a motorcycle.
Me: He can't. He's in the wilderness.
Brother: Then make it a four-wheel-drive motorcycle!
hm...
Really nice poem. My impression was that the hero's pride was hurt, but he got a small lesson of humility out of it. So he's a little lost, not understanding the people's apparent ingratitude, and starting to think that maybe he didn't deserve their praise as much as he thought he did, though not quite getting why. And the girl loves the hero, but now that he's confused and has sort of let himself down, she's disappointed in him. But that doesn't really touch on what you said in your comment. Methinks I shall read it once or twice more, and what you said as well. hm....
hmmm...
I like it, even if it is a bit hard to understand at first. I like the fact that everyone can take something different away from it-- that's what art is, really. And poetry. At any rate, I think it's like the hero who's so good at saving everyone that they don't even know there was a danger, and then they don't know that they're saved. Like they're taking it for granted, becuase he saved them so well that they never even knew something bad could've happened.
That's what I've got from it so far. But I think this is one of those poems where the more times you read it, the more ways you think about it and understand it.
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"It is not death that makes us understand one another, but poetry."
--Lavinia
Hmm... Well, I get it a bit
Hmm...
Well, I get it a bit better now. I like it.
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He who is near to his Captain is sure to be a target for the archers.
-Amy Carmichael
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief
It's funny how many people
It's funny how many people have said "Hmm..." in their comments. :D
I see it as the girl is in love with the hero, and she knows he's a hero; but when he goes to fight the monster, she doesn't believe he can defeat it, so in her fear she is sad and angry. The hero in turn becomes sad and angry because nobody believes in him, or recognizes that he did defeat the beast...
But happiness is around the corner for both girl and hero when he returns home to her: she realizes he's okay, and he realizes that it doesn't matter what strangers think; if the people you love believe in you, nothing else is worth a fig.
That's my take on it, at least. :D
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"Elves and Dragons! Cabbages and potatoes are better for me and you. Don't go getting mixed up in the business of your betters, or you'll land in trouble too big for you." — Hamfast Gamgee (the Gaffer)
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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]
Hmm, I did not even notice
Hmm, I did not even notice that. :D
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He who is near to his Captain is sure to be a target for the archers.
-Amy Carmichael
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief
I had to read it a couple
I had to read it a couple times to make sure I had read it right.
I'm still not sure I know what it means.
So I'm going to read it again and see.
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He who is near to his Captain is sure to be a target for the archers.
-Amy Carmichael
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief