Coping

Submitted by Flying Past Clouds on Sat, 10/27/2012 - 00:57

The start of September
The end of December
Meetings and greetings
October, November

Sleep and dream
of sunlight beams
Milk and eggs
Sugar, cream

Dusk and dawn
An ending song
Hold my hand and
Tag along

Yes or no
Please don't go
Not a whisper
Ashes, snow

Author's age when written
13
Genre
Poetry
Notes

To AE and RE, with love.

Comments

Maddi

Wed, 01/09/2013 - 08:46

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I LOVE LOVE the rhythm! It's great! And the sorta abstract words. :) That added to it. But it felt unfinished. Maybe you could fix that somehow.
I like it. Good job. ;)

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

little woman

Sat, 03/09/2013 - 22:37

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This is lovely! I agree about the rhyme scheme. ^ It works so nicely with the words! I think it is perfect the way it is, though.
My favorite part:

"Dusk and dawn
An ending song
Hold my hand and
Tag along

Yes or no
Please don't go
Not a whisper
Ashes, snow"

The most astonishing thing about miracles is that they happen.
-G. K. Chesterton