Crickets and fans sound in my ear
I wait for dawn's rays to appear
But pain cannot be kept at bay
I try to push the fog away
And onwards through the haze I see
That sleep may make its way to me
And then the beast draws near again
Insomnia is labeled "sin"
It's dreaded force to me denies
Blessed sleep and still it decries
That I must be awake at night
While rest is scared away by sight
Comments
You definitely made me feel
You definitely made me feel the emotions in this strongly....well done. And I think anyone would sympathize with you. :(
(Also, this is content-commentary and not on the writing itself-- but insomnia labeled as a sin?? Oh my goodness, that seems so not right to me. Anyway, just had to throw out my indignation there. :D )
Fri, 08/19/2016 - 21:25
In reply to You definitely made me feel by Sarah Bethany
Lol I was a little surprised
Lol I was a little surprised at that too! But does it just express frustration at the insomnia it self, like calling it names or something? : P I don't know!
:)
That was more an expression of frustration towards insomnia. :) I don't think that insomnia is literally sin. :P
Thanks for your lovely comments!
I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.
Ohhhhhh, that makes more
Ohhhhhh, that makes more sense to me now hahahahaha. I was a little nervous for a second that some people were saying insomnia was a sin, and I just had to protest hahaha. But now I get it ;)
I like this :)
I like this :)
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
I like this, the rhyming is
I like this, the rhyming is really intriguing:)
Do Justice//Love Mercy//Walk Humbly
Mon, 08/29/2016 - 14:28
In reply to I like this, the rhyming is by Mikaela Grace
Thank you, Maddi and Mikki!!
Thank you, Maddi and Mikki!!
I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.
The rhyme and rhythm really
The rhyme and rhythm really amplify the sentiment expressed - nicely done!