I.
there is
sticky air
and
the cool
blues and
yellow streetlights
II.
and then
the outline of
his driveway is
fragmented,
no
fractured
with intermittent
shadows
III.
further, his
cinnamon arm
reaching for
me?
or the air
behind my
head
I realized it had been over a month since I last posted! I have been so busy. This is one of the pieces I wrote for my Advanced Poetry class. I will try to catch up on reading very soon, so expect comments from me!
Comments
The rhythm of this is ON
The rhythm of this is ON POINT, and I loved the word "intermittent" for some reason. If you were trying to capture shadows and cool spaces and things-in-between, you really succeeded with the shape of your poem and the words you chose!!
Haven't been on here in
Haven't been on here in forever and I really miss reading your poetry! It's so good and this is fabulous!!!!! Love it!!!
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!
Thank you, friends!!!
Thank you, friends!!!
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
!!!!!!
How good is this?? I can't get over it! "intermittent" I barely see that word in poems, but yet it went so perfectly! This advanced poetry class is bringing out the brilliant talent in you for sure :)
Can't stop reading it....
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
Thanks, Maddi!
Thanks, Maddi!
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
Lovely! Your writing has
Lovely! Your writing has grown so much--this is gorgeous. It's such vivid writing, with clear, potent images accompanying each stanza. I WANT TO TAKE YOUR ADVANCED POETRY CLASS. Seriously. This is excellent!