Verse 1 You You are looking at me Everything that I think's Tainted by Your opinion of me Making little comments Talking bout my life Acting like you know me Subtly letting on that I don't try Well, why should I Chorus No Feels like I've eating All my words since the day We met Cruising down the street Of another tortured dream I bet Struggle to convince myself it Wasn't something that I said I see red
Verse 2 Me I might've used to believe Now I wouldn't dare drink From your hand Dry throat and I'm weary Drawing circles squarely Just because I can Best part of it ending You can't do a single thing Bout it Bout it
Chorus
Bridge Ruby for your eyes Magenta for your smile Crimson for the words You made me say Russet for your lies Cherry for your might Scarlet for the will You stole away
Chorus No No I see red I see red I've seen red
Hellloooo! I wrote this song and would love some feedback! I think that song lyrics qualify as poetry, so I'm posting these as that! :) I posted a video online of the song, if you'd feel so inclined as to watch! Thank you--I appreciate it! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OWJ4PfjReus
Comments
Thank you, thank you, thank
Thank you, thank you, thank you! Your comments always bring a smile to my face. As always, I so appreciate your thoughtful words! :) :) :)
You have a beautiful voice,
You have a beautiful voice, and your song was really clever with the catchy rhythm. You are gifted musically! You must have worked hard to learn the piece and play it as well as sing it at the same time...great job. :)
I just looked up what it meant to "see red" because I wasn't sure if it was a cliche. But it was interesting how you used different shades of red in the verse, and then had that chorus.
"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson
Thank you, Megan! :) (...see
Thank you, Megan! :) (...see what I did there?!?) I really appreciate your comment! And you taking the time to watch the video.
I was trying to use a lot of imagery and metaphor in the lyrics, so "I see red" just popped into my head. I'm pretty sure it's a cliche...but I can't say for sure! I didn't really have a direction for this or a meaning until it was done. It's fictional, but then again, a lot of my songs are.
Thank you, thank you, thank you!
I love you and I think this
I love you and I think this is fabulous!
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!
Your voice is so classical,
Your voice is so classical, and yet so your own! I know I've said this before, but I imagine it on the radio when I hear you sing. So pure and sweet and strong. So beautiful. And your lyrics are gorgeous -- I was so impressed with your multiple red-usages. So clever and lovely!