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Submitted by Madeline on Fri, 08/02/2013 - 13:40

I'm Beautiful
That's what he called me today
I think I'm in love

I'm Gorgeous
When I wear that one dress
That stops just above my knees

I'm Pretty
In my ripped jeans and
Baggy shirt

I'm Luminous
When I take time to apply that
Extra layer of foundation

I'm Stunning
As I stand there and I
Can't go back

I'm Perfect
As I walk out the door
By myself

Well I think

I'm Cold
As the night air
Encircles me

I'm Angry
When he doesn't reply
To my texts

I'm Hurt
When he brushes past me
At school the next day

I'm Sick
In a bathroom stall
Trying not to cry

I'm Nothing
To him
And never was

I'm Wary
Of the next one
To come

Author's age when written
15
Genre
Poetry
Notes

idek. *shakes head* Again, a poem completely derived from nothing but pure fiction. Oh, well. Lemme know, people.

Comments

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Sat, 08/03/2013 - 01:00

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I like this, and I think it has a good idea behind it, but I could tell that you were disconnected. I think that any writing has to come with at least a grain of truth. :)

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Madeline

Sat, 08/03/2013 - 01:03

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Oh, thanks. :) Well, I wouldn't say that I myself felt disconnected from it. Just that it had nothing to do with any personal experience of mine. A lot of what I write with romance in it hasn't come from me personally, since I haven't had that sort of relationship. I just picture it, I guess. haha

Maddi

Sat, 08/03/2013 - 01:10

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I like this...how it flows. I like the image it creates, with all the clothes, makeup, texts, bathroom stalls...creative. Nice job.

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

Kassady

Tue, 08/06/2013 - 20:25

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I liked it until the end :P I was like, oh, this is a nice positive poem for a change.... wamp, wamp, wamp, waaaaamp! LOL!

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