Senseless

Submitted by Madeline on Wed, 12/19/2012 - 23:29

Senseless

The morning doves cooed to me
On the dewy green
Lush feathers, lush blades
Beneath my naked feet
I closed my shining silver eyes
To the golden world
Which went abruptly black
And fell into a swirl
Beneath the cusp of melancholy
And the ides of grey
I’m all alone amidst the thousands
Senseless, I am prey

Author's age when written
15
Genre
Poetry
Notes
What would you say this poem is about to you? (Is that vain to ask if you're the writer??? Gah! I hope not. If it is, ignore me. Thanks). I'm just curious--I have a storyline for it in my head, but I wondered if other people would interpret it the same way. Thank you soso much!

P.S. Not sure if the word "ides" makes sense in this poem, but it popped into my head. Feedback is appreciated!

Comments

Lucy Anne

Wed, 12/19/2012 - 23:34

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Hmm...that's a hard question.

To me, this is about beauty, senseless, prey, maybe transported into a different world of BLACK, grass, um....hmm! I dunno.

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

Maddi

Thu, 12/20/2012 - 00:06

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I love this! Love love love it. Gee, I don't know. Like a sorta breathing in type fantasy world. I'm sorry, I have not a clue. But it is great.

A story, a story I hear? Bring it on, whatever it is! :D

EDIT: That made no sense whatsoever.

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

Benjamin

Thu, 12/20/2012 - 00:20

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This sounds like so many "Christians" I have known. They have lived blithely in "faith," claiming to be so happy in Christ. But then they encounter trials and are lost, lost in the darkness of doubt, pleasures, and sin.

This probably has nothing to do with what you intended, but that is what was brought to my mind.

“D’ye know what Calvary was? What? What? What? It was damnation; and he took it lovingly.”
~John Duncan

Madeline

Tue, 01/01/2013 - 23:19

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Thank you all for being kind enough to share your interpretations. :) I so appreciate it.

Lucy--LOL! Hahaha. :D

Maddi--It made sense! Definitely!

Benjamin--Cool! I'm glad it made you think of something. That's what I'd hoped.

I wrote this and then decided it seems to be about someone who gives up everything for someone--and at first everything is perfect, and kind of dreamy, but then they see they've alienated themselves from everyone but that person, and they're alone.

So! Cheerful! ;))))

Thank you!