Meadowlark

Submitted by Madeline on Thu, 08/16/2012 - 14:16

Hellloooooo! :-)
Thanks to all you Reaching Rachel people for reading Reaching Rachel! (if you see this) Still working on the next chapter.
And thank you to anyone who is about to take the time to read this! Haha!
-Homey :D
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Take me to the meadowlarks
They lurk in the dangerous dark
And if you venture to those parts
You’d be pecked (to death)

But I don’t care—I’ve nothing to lose
Nothing to lose, except my life
And I’m afraid (my dear) at times
That doesn’t seem such a horrible price

Maybe I’d befriend them; I don’t really care
I'm desperate for a break from the ever-living air
Because sometimes breathing is despair
But not if they peck me (to death)

See, I know you’d certainly mind
But really (darling) I’d be great
Because only they can truly satiate
This thirst, to sober up my gait

So let me go to the meadowlarks
The ones that lurk in the dangerous dark
Because if I venture to those parts
They might just let me fly

Author's age when written
14
Genre
Notes

Thoughts are appreciated! :)

Comments

I think this was pretty good; at the start I thought putting the (death) bit in was wierd but it fit in at the end!

And I really like the message; all the verses were great. JOB WELL DONE ON THIS! :D <3

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

Hm, interesting. Even though it was a bit of a dark subject, it still was quirky and kind of funny. It had a good, definite rhythm. Good job!

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

LOL! This is the second dark entry I've read tonight! LOL! Both in a row. Both VERY well done, may I add! LOL! Very... interesting! Loved the rythme and the writing!
Like all your writing- love it!

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