Off Stage
you almost were
and then you weren't.
before the lights went up,
you disappeared.
on Friday
a full house
the first night
of what could have been
many more.
we held our breath
and everyone's hearts pounded
when the stage
empty
naked
alone
appeared before us
with no one to usher us in
to that fantasy world of yours
you had no other,
no one could play your part
gone was the magic,
the echo of the heart
expecting something to hope for
gone was the fantasy
we wanted to believe in
gone was the love
we hoped to find
you went off stage
done, the play finished
before it began
Comments
This was a very interesting
This was a very interesting and unusual read. I liked the sense of unspoken backstory (I consider that one of the highest forms of literary art). Well done.
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Brother: Your character should drive a motorcycle.
Me: He can't. He's in the wilderness.
Brother: Then make it a four-wheel-drive motorcycle!
Great job! As the above
Great job! As the above commenters have mentioned, it was slightly haunting; particularly in the last verse. I really enjoyed it :)
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
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Hmmm...
It's kind of haunting. I like it :)
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