Surge, Beat

Submitted by Bernadette on Mon, 05/17/2010 - 19:14

 

 

Crash,

       Pound,

                Pull.

                      Crash,

                             Roar,

                                    Throb.

 

Roll,

      Lap,

          Swirl.

                 Roll,

                       Curve,

                               Rise.

 

                               Pour,

                               Pound,

                               Roar.

                          Surge, surge,

                                Slow.

                          Beat, beat,

                          Pull, pull,

                                        Roll.

                          Crash,

                         Tear,

                        Rise,

                       Fall,

                     Skip,

                    Drown,

                  Torn.

 

Beat,

   Beat,

        Beat.

 

Slow,

  Slow,

      Slow.

 

Calm, calm,

Surge, beat.

 

 

Author's age when written
12
Genre
Poetry
Tags
Sea
Words
waves

Comments

Elizabeth

Mon, 05/17/2010 - 21:22

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This was awesomeness!!!! Loved it! Your words and set up were perfect!

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The Holy Spirit is the quiet guest of our soul." -St. Augustine

E

Wed, 05/19/2010 - 19:43

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I tried to comment on this as soon as it came up but I was all out of comments!!! I love it!

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Clare Marie

Wed, 05/19/2010 - 23:51

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This was wonderful!!  The rhythm, choice of words, timing -- everything was just right. :)

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Hannah W.

Thu, 05/20/2010 - 13:46

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It reminded me of the ocean, and the waves with its rhythm and the way you made the lines go out and in.... It was like putting my ear to one of those big shells.