Monsters Under My Bed

Submitted by Suzie on Sun, 12/12/2010 - 02:55

 When bedtime comes 'round, I am filled up with dread. 
I’ve monsters, MONSTERS, under my bed!
They're angry, they're hungry, they drool, and they shed!
I’ve monsters down there an' they all want me dead!
My mum says good night; I am tucked snugly in.
I lie in the dark with the sheets to my chin.
I hear them! They're stirring! They mutter and growl!
They smack and they slobber, they moan and they yowl!
"We're hungry!" They bellow, "It's time for a meal!"
I hug my stuffed teddy. "Don't eat me!" I squeal.
"Who said that?" one cries out, "Is somebody there?
Who are you? What are you? And might I ask where?"
I peek in at them- they peek out at me.
There's six, with a blanket all spread out for tea.
"What is it?" They scream, "Will it eat us, I wonder?"
They rise in a second, cast china asunder.
I climb out of bed, kick the covers away.
"Don't worry, I've just HAD my supper!" I say.
The monsters peep out and blink wee eyes at me.
"You're full, then?" They ask, "You won't join us for tea?"
"No, thank you," I say, "but I WOULD like to know,
Do you folks eat children?" They laugh. "Heavens, no!
We like to eat teacakes and warm gingerbread!"
I sigh and crawl happily back into bed.
So, now I don't worry. These monsters are small,
and, (save for snatched teacakes,) do no harm at all.

Author's age when written
19
Genre
Poetry
Tags
monsters
Tea
bedtime

Comments

LoriAnn

Mon, 12/13/2010 - 15:54

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All my friends--Mary, Heather, Kestrel, Anne...all of you! Meet and greet Suzie, my dear friend. This is only one of the many fantasic things she's written, and you should all adore and follow her writings avidly.

So there.

And as for you, Suzie my dear, have I told you just how much I adore this poem? :)

Julie

Mon, 12/13/2010 - 19:07

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Any writing friend of Trav's (another one of LoriAnn's many names) is a friend of mine. Pleased to meet you. I love the change in tone in this poem, it works excellently

Formerly Kestrel

Anna

Mon, 12/13/2010 - 19:10

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How adorable! The monsters under my bed aren't half so nice.

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Mary

Fri, 12/17/2010 - 04:40

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And welcome to AP! I'm Mary, one of LoriAnn's rather strange friends that perhaps you've heard about... but if you have and it was anything too embarrassing, just smile and don't tell me about it. : P

Welcome aboard, and I hope to see more of your writing soon!

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Brother: Then make it a four-wheel-drive motorcycle!

Kassady

Mon, 12/20/2010 - 02:57

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Very well done Suzie.

*bellows* WELCOME, WELCOME, WELCOME!!!!!

So glade that you could join!

I loved how you worded this! Such a lovely and delightful poem! And I abslotuly loved the rythm  (I love ryming poems, myself, but "to each, their own"!).

I really adored the line :

My mum says good night; I am tucked snugly in.
I lie in the dark with the sheets to my chin.
I hear them! They're stirring! They mutter and growl!
They smack and they slobber, they moan and they yowl!

hehehe!

Now I believe I have used up all my vocabulary, so..

Welcome, good job! and...

Write on!

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!

Madeline

Fri, 12/24/2010 - 13:56

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 That was terrific. I think that was one of the best poems I have ever read, really! It reminded me of Shel Silverstein...the rhythm and rhyming is fantastic. I was sucked in from the beginning. If there's any way possible, I would seek publishing. I can imagine this in a children's book for sure! 

Oh, and welcome to AP! So glad to have you on here. I can't wait to see more of your stories!

Bridget

Sat, 12/25/2010 - 06:32

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Haha, this is amazing!  I love how you transform the monsters into cute little things, and the way you rhymed it was very good.

"I always wonder why birds stay in the same place when they can fly anywhere on the earth. Then I ask myself the same question." - Harun Yahya

James

Wed, 03/30/2011 - 04:13

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Great job, Suzie.  I hope you write more.

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