I Fall As Do The Shooting Stars

Submitted by Sarah on Sat, 09/28/2013 - 05:39

I fall as do the shooting stars:
brilliant, beautiful, and short lived.
Lives full of passion are rarely long.
I want to land on Mars,
climb K2 and have survived,
be elderly but still strong.

But accidents do happen;
no one’s luck lasts forever.
My time will come.
At the moment when
I cannot be clever
and my life is done

To be aware is my wish,
not foolishly hoping
for improbable miracles.
For my courage I’ll fish,
a song of bravery sing,
for the spirit is indomitable.

Author's age when written
19
Genre
Poetry
Tags
life
passion

Comments

E

Mon, 09/30/2013 - 04:31

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This is lovely. I adored your wording and the rhythm was great.
"I fall as do the shooting stars:
brilliant, beautiful, and short lived.
Lives full of passion are rarely long." Those opening lines were my favorite.

"To be aware is my wish,
not foolishly hoping
for improbable miracles...for the spirit is indomitable."

Great job!

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Maddi

Fri, 10/04/2013 - 01:34

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I love the opening lines as well.
"I fall as do the shooting stars:
brilliant, beautiful, and short lived."

And this is like a wake-up call to reality:
"But accidents do happen;
no one’s luck lasts forever."

"for the spirit is indomitable."

Purely lovely. Great job!

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh