you linger in the air like a slight tinge of mildew
let alone for too long, allowed to solder
and seep into the cracks in my exterior
i had a cold, you see
that is why i was unable to sniff you out
why costumed men didn't come in immediately
and try to starve you away
my parents, they tried
i was too brazen to let them
so certain that this brand of mold wouldn't be harmful
but--who was i kidding--
not even myself
i knew better, i've known better
i'll always know better
and i think that somehow that makes it worse
that i finally took care of this infuriating mildew
and still it lingers in the cracks, pores, floorboards
it's grown into the couch pillows, and yellowed the walls
it climbs up the basement steps and sucks out the air
it causes me to drag my feet and stumble through my words
and i think that maybe
the only solution for this old house
is for it to be torn down
Odd little poem here! :)) Thoughts are 100\% appreciated.
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Ditto
I thought it was a person too... but then it sort of didn't make sense... and then it did again. But I loved this! The Wording was fabulous. Really well worded.
Good job!
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Thanks, guys! Yeah...it kind
Thanks, guys!
Yeah...it kind of changes from calling the person 'you' to 'mildew'. :))) So it's still about a person, but they change what they're calling the person.
The first stanza was my
The first stanza was my favorite.
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief
At first I thought it was
At first I thought it was some sort of metaphor for a person- which I guess it still could be. I liked the way you phrased everything.
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond