She tries to see
With one eye
Into the leaded glass
A foggy life
A quiet struggle
She watches as they pass
Living life
As she'd like to
When things go way too fast
But she draws back
Denied again
And off away she's cast
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Comments
Thank you Aredhel!
I appreciate your comment. I'm glad you felt such while reading the poem--it was intended! I tried to make it mysterious yet revealing.
I need to get reading on the Overlords! Time seems so short. ;)
I agree with everything
I agree with everything Aredhel said! This is marvellous. I really like the sense of mystery. It leaves you thinking.
Thank you Renee!
I so appreciate your comment! :)
By the way--your writing is insanely good. Just thought I'd mention it. ;)
I like this.
It's mysterious, and quiet ( in a good way) which makes it more powerful if that makes sense. I l like that you don't say everything. I think that the girl's blinded in one eye. I like the rhyme scheme. Its simple but suits the poem.