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I See Him
by Me
Verse 1
He’s funny
That’s the first reason
He’s witty
I’d love to tease him
To have
His eyes
On me
I’m selfish
Don’t need a reason
I’m lying
I don’t believe it
Even for
For a moment
That it’d be
Anything
Chorus
What would I say
Would it be amusing
Probably not
I know it’s confusing
The way this has ensued
Whatever he says it’ll make me nervous
To stand on my own is a great disservice
To everyone who sees me
Like I see him x3
Verse 2
He’s back
In the corners of my head
I’m afraid
Of what will happen
When he
Decides
To leave
I’m brave
I can say that much
Yet I’d give in
Though it’s just a hunch
That without him
I’d see
More clearly
Everything
Chorus
Bridge
I came to petition
Against the admittance
Of your indifference
To me
Please don’t resist it
You see I insist it
If I want this so badly it’ll happen
Don’t you think?
Or is that just too
Easy
Probably
Chorus
And I see him
But I see him
But I see him
Hi guys! So I thought I'd do something a bit different and post the lyrics to a song I wrote fairly recently. It's called "I See Him" and I think the lyrics are pretty self-explanatory. :) I'd love to know your thoughts on the lyrics/song in general--critiques are welcomed! I also have uploaded a video of me singing it so you can get an idea of the melody. It's not perfect, so sorry for that! Here's the link: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SFb4OYTPXa0 And just for backup, because I'm a wee bit paranoid about posting my music openly: ALL RIGHTS TO ME** Critiques are very welcome!
Comments
Wow, Homey! New favorite! I
Wow, Homey! New favorite! I listened to it on YouTube and it was so lovely and I love the arrangement of it. I do have to say it was hard to hear the words clearly, but that might be the distance of where you stood and the camera and such. I did not think you were schreachy at ALL, omg, your voice was fabulous!
I think this is enjoyable, lovely, and flows beautifully! The wording was easy to follow and like I said, flowed. It would definitely be in the top ten iTunes indie genre, I would say! I wonder if you could add guitar notes at all? It would be interesting to see what all you could do with it, but I like it as it is as well! Very, very well done!
Love!
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!
*steals Homey's rights*
Just kidding.... I agree with the need for protection out there.
First of all, I LOVE how you sing with your body!
I wish I hadn't read your note before listening to it, because then I kept looking for the 'screeching' without meaning to, and I didn't hear it at all. This song was gorgeous.
I still think you deserve to be on the radio, right next to the likes of Dido. I think that's where you'll be if you ever wanted to!
Goodness Homey!
How on earth did I miss this treasure! I must've been hiding under a rock too long or something! This was fabulous! I listened to the video and I absolutely loved the song! You did a wonderful job :) And for the record (like that little pun there?), your voice is very beautiful! I think we always critique our voices more harshly than we should! Lovey, lovely, lovely!
"Be an example to all believers in what you say, in the way you live, in your love, your faith, and your purity." 1 Timothy 4:12
Very well-done! It flows
Very well-done! It flows nicely. There was one part that was confusing to me, but it may just be a typo.
"I’m brave
I can say that much
Yet I’ve give in
Though it’s just a hunch
That without him
I’d see
More clearly
Everything"
I didn't watch the YouTube 'cause I don't have enough data left, but I will watch it as soon as my next plan kicks in.
I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.