A Day in the Life of Sam

Submitted by Maddi on Sat, 07/21/2012 - 03:26

Sam rolled onto the other side of the bed. Grabbing the alarm clock off the bedside table, she read the time: 9:30.
“Heck!” she mumbled. “I’m late for the interview!”

Still half asleep, Sam rushed out of the room and tumbled down the stairs towards the kitchen.

“Hey, looks like you finally woke up.”

Sam’s dad, Mr Miller greeted her.

“Dad, please, please can you drop me off to the job interview? I’m already behind time and I don’t have a ride,” Samantha said through her mouth-full of cornflakes.

Mr Miller shook his head.

“I’m sorry, honey, I gotta take the twins to Little Athletics. It’s Saturday morning, you know.”

Samantha sighed, then, with breakfast bowl still in hand, she rushed to the master bedroom.

“Mum, mum can you please drop me off for the job interview?”

Samantha held her breath (and the cornflakes that were still inside) as her mum finished putting on the final touches of her make-up on. Dropping the lipstick tube in her handbag, Mrs Miller turned around to face her daughter. Samantha could already tell what the answer was by looking at her face.

“Oh, Sam, I’m so sorry. I’ve got to leave with Tina in five minutes for the farmers market, or otherwise we won’t have any fresh food for next week.”

Sam looked down at her shoes with bitter disappointment.

“Well how on earth am I going to get there in time?” muttered Samantha, almost daring her mum to think up some way of getting her to the important interview.

“Well—” said Mrs Miller, stuffing her handbag full of the ‘necessary’ things a woman might need on a shopping expedition.

“I know, why don’t you ask Liam if he’ll drive you there before football?” Liam was the oldest of the eight Miller kids, and since getting his drivers licence, both parents had knighted him the third chauffeur of the Miller family, (of course, this was all done unofficially).

Sam turned on her heel and running down the hallway ran smack bam into Liam.

“Sorry, Liam! Um, I really need a ride down to the job interview; and everyone else is stuck doing something different and I was wondering please, please can you drop me down there before football?”

Liam, after getting over being run into, opened his mouth to say “No”, but then looked at his sister’s pleading face.

He paused.

It wouldn’t really harm to miss out on five minutes of match, would it?
In one more final attempt, Sam clasped her hands together and fell at his feet and looked up and said in her most distressed tone:“I’m desperate.”

Then they both collapsed into a fit of giggles. Liam shook his head and gave his sister a hand up.

“Alright, I’ll drop you off, Miss Desperate.”

Sam rushed off down the hallway. “Thanks Liam, I owe you one. I’ll just get dressed quickly— don’t leave without me!” she yelled down the stairs.

“Well I just might, knowing how long it takes girls to get ready!” Liam replied.

Sam rushed to her wardrobe and flung the doors open. After chucking most of its contents on the floor, she finally decided on a floral top, some beige-coloured jeans and a pair of purple ballet flats. Opening a bottle of blue sparkly mascara, Sam splashed some quickly on her eyelashes, screwed open a tube of light pink lipstick and put some of that on as well. Grabbing her denim jacket of the dressing table and thrusting her mobile in her jean pocket, Sam stomped down the stairs, only to run straight back up again to snatch her wallet and then she was off. Banging the front door open, Sam saw that Liam and Ben were already waiting in the car.

“Hurry up, Sam, we’re gonna be late!” cried Ben, leaning over the drivers seat to honk the horn for added enthusiasm.
Opening the car door and plonking down on the front seat, Sam replied:

“Well, Liam wouldn’t have left me behind; besides, you’re always late for your footy matches anyway!”

Liam hid a grin. Everybody knew Sam hated being late.

“What are you smirking at?” huffed Sam, rather grumpily.

“Oh, nothing. Which café shop are you applying for?”

“The one in town next to the mall; it’s called….uh…” Sam racked her brain, but the name had just slipped her mind.

“Ha, you can’t even remember the name of the place you’re gonna work at!”

Sam looked at her little brother in frustration. Liam quickly intervened before World War III broke out.

“Ben, just give her break. We’re nearly there.”

“How can we be nearly be there when we don’t know where it is?” whined Ben.

Suddenly Sam remembered. “Mandies Milkshakes!” she cried, causing Liam to swerve a little.

“Crikey!” yelled Ben, just as loud as Sam.

“Okay, both of you just shut up until we get there!”

Sam glanced over at Ben. Liam hardly ever yelled at them; much less told them to shut up. Ben shrugged his shoulders. It wasn’t his fault Liam was upset; Sam was the one who made them late in the first place!

Pulling up outside the shop front, Liam turned around to face both of them.

“Sorry I yelled at you guys,” he apologized. Sam and Ben nodded their heads.
“Okay, well, I think Sam’s got a job interview to go to and we’re already late for the footy game!”

Laying his hand on Sam’s arm, Liam whispered: “Good luck, sis. I know you’ll get this job easy.”

Sam nodded in reply. “Thanks.”

Pushing the door open of the café, Sam took a look around her. She was standing a huge old-fashioned milk bar, with lots of bright colours. There was hardly anyone else in the shop; one oversized guy eating a hamburger, two old ladies gossiping over a cup of coffee, and a girl about her own age standing with her back towards Sam. Looking closer, Sam felt that there was something vaguely familiar about the girl. Abruptly the girl turned around. As the light fell upon her features, Sam gasped.

“Sky!—what—what are you doing here?”

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The storyline is good but since you don't make another paragraph whenever a new speaker is talking, it makes this story rather confusing at first. And, maybe it is just me...but I don't feel that you made Liam yell at his brother and sister enough for the reader to realize he was yelling at him. But I still think that the storyline is interesting.

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

Oh and something else you might want to change...maybe you should put more pronouns instead of saying, "Sam " all the time. :) Otherwise, it may turn out rather arkward at times.

Btw, I just realized you and I are very similiar! I am the eldest of my three other sisters and I also love LOVE the Anne series. And in your bio, you mentioned that if you had to pick your favorite book from the Anne series, it would be 'Anne of Ingleside' and 'Anne's House of Dreams'~~ same goes for me! :D

Anyways, God Bless!

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

Hey, thanks for reading! I was afraid everyone would not bother to read any more of my story once they read the first paragraph. No, seriously, I thought that.

Okay. I thought about having a new paragraph when somebody talks, but on my thing it says that it will break the lines automatically. Obviously not. And when I went to make the changes, it made a new copy and used all my posts up when I thought it would just change the old one. (sigh) oh well, I gotta lot to learn!!

Sorry about Liam thing; I guess me being the author already knows my character inside out, and Liam is the peacemaker and never yells at his siblings! Ha, I will do something about that next time.

I'm really sorry, but what do mean by pronouns? I live in Australia, and here it means like, um.... here, instead of: Sam glanced over at Ben. OR
I glanced over at Ben. I don't really want to make it like Sam is telling the story to the readers. Do you get me? I don't know if I'm making any sense. Please tell me!

Yeah, I love the Anne series! I would definitely be (I hope) a 'kindred spirit'
to Anne, we are very much alike. I am also a dreamer; I love to dream what it would be like to visit mermaids under the sea while I am doing school work, or imagining pretend conversations between fellow fairies.
I love 'the scope for imagination' line.

Please, other ap people, please comment and tell me if I need to make anything more clear. Also, could you please express your interest in whether you'd like Sam to get the job at 'Mandie's Milkshakes' or not. Thanks! And whether or not this is worth the trouble of writing chapter 2!

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

I just thought of something Lucy Anne! Do you mean instead of: Pushing the door open of the café, Sam took a look around her. OR: Pushing the door open of the café, she took a look around her.

Is that what you meant?! Please comment again and point me in the right direction please! Thanks for putting up with my stupidity! lol God Bless oxo

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

You are very welcome! I like reading people's writings alot. :)

Pronouns are words that replace nouns and nouns are people, place, thing, or idea.

I noticed that throughout the whole story, you kept repeating "Sam" and I think you should have put more pronouns in this story.

I like the name of the store "Mandi's Milkshakes" alot.

I love Anne! I love the "scope for imagination" line too but I love the idea of "kindred spirits" even more. :) Have you ever watched the Anne movie? (The one Megan Follows was casted as Anne)

About the paragraphs, you can always edit your stuff after you publish. And you really should put more paragraphs. :)

I know you know Liam more than your readers do so...since WE don't know him at all, in the beginning of the story or something, you should probably tell us that he usually is a peacemaker.

Sorry I replied so late. I have been very VERY busy lately especially I am away from my home 'cause I am helping out at my friend's house this whole week-- I am going home tonight so I should hopefully be more active on AP again! :)

God Bless!

p.s. oh, yes, you should post more! :)

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

Thank you, thank you, thank you! I love it when poeple give me feedback!

Yes, I have seen the movie Anne with Megan Follows in it. All three! I love them! You know how in movies the main character is never how you imagine her/him in the book? Well, in these movies, Anne looked pretty much how I expected her to look! Ha

Okay, so I need to put more paragraghs, more pronouns (now that I have a better idea of how to use them; lol) and I should edit my stories after I publish them. Okay, great stuff! Thanks for the advice!

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

Maddi,
I liked this a lot, just I think there needs to be paragraphs, :) All the same, you did an excellent job :)
~Sarah <3

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Football=soccer? :D Right? Yes? Just checking! LOL!

I really, really liked this. I love the language--your adjectives are perfect!

Liam was the oldest of the eight Miller kids, and since getting his drivers licence, both parents had knighted him the third chauffeur of the Miller family

Sam stomped down the stairs, only to run straight back up again to snatch her wallet and then she was off. (that made me smile--haha! I've totally done that before).

Liam quickly intervened before World War III broke out.

Liam exploded with the frustration of a disturbed driver.

Haha--I really liked all those lines. I don't know why; I just did. Sorry I didn't get to this story sooner! :D

And as for the job, yeah--she should get it! Why not? ;-)

Now I'm off to read the second chapter and find out who Sky is!

Good job!
-Homey :D

No, this time I meant Football! Footy! When I mean soccer, I'll write: SOCCER!

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

Cute! I liked it! Of course, I didn't notice anything wrong with your paragraphs... of course, that would come from me, who doesn't know a thing about a paragraph ;-P But I reallly liked the story so far. I think it was good beginning as well, active enough for the reader to be interested and enough information for the reader to follow.

So is the character Austrian? British? Australian (did I spell that right)? American? I think that is one thing that needs to be cleared up.

I like it! Great job!

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Write On!

Thanks girls!

Kassady..... I kinda had in mind that she was American. And yes, you did spell Australian right! Thanks so much for commenting!

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh

Thanks girls!

Kassady..... I kinda had in mind that she was American. And yes, you did spell Australian right! Thanks so much for commenting!

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh