They’re six and nine
They smell of daisies
And wear scalloped shorts
To them I’m this laughing, pretty girl
Blonde hair, blue eyes
‘Perfect’ hair, style so they said
And everything that matters
Oh, how glad I am that I display that
Because they’re so young
I can hardly blame them for
Not knowing what’s behind the scenes
What about the others
How do I look to them
To him, to her
Probably just this flirt
Who knows no better than to
Flaunt her red nails and
Shake off her timeless worries
With
Effortless laughter
Unbeknown to them
There’s so much more
I can’t reveal it in a single sentence
Yay...poem time ;)
Comments
This is really good, and it
This is really good, and it really captures common attitudes among girls right now. You wrote descriptively, I really like it. : )
Very good poem, Maddi! Well
Very good poem, Maddi! Well written and good imagery with a great title! There's some truth in this too, and the first stanza drew me in just like a story. Most poems I've read don't have that. This is your best poem, I'm sure! I read it two times. The flow made me hold my breath through the whole thing, and read it all over again.
"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson
:D
This is great! I really, really enjoyed this poem! It didn't exactly flow for me in any particular way, but it definitely had a rhythme. I enjoyed your wording and the imagery, the way you twisted the words around in a line to express yourself.
My favorite lines are definitely the last three! I really, really, really loved it!
I'm super spiked about all this poetry from everyone! Spring is obviously the time for poetry!!! LOVE IT!!!
This was great, hoping to see more of your poetry soon ;)
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!
Thanks girls!
It was so lovely to see all your comments this morning!
@ Erin: Thankyou :)
@Hannah: And thanks to you too!
@ Megan: :D Yay! A comment from you as well! Thanks so much.
@ Kassady: Haha, thanks. Although, it's not spring for me here, it's autumn. Except that you guys call it fall *shrug*
Again, thankyou everyone! More poetry soon!
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
I really love this. It had a
I really love this. It had a classiness and an elegance to it, which I really liked. they smell of daisies/and wear scalloped shores This perfectly describes the kind of incredulous reaction one has to kids thinking they're absolutely fabulous. :)
Who knows no better than to
Flaunt her red nails and
Shake off her timeless worries
With
Effortless laughter
I REALLY ADORE THAT WHOLE BIT SO MUCH!
:P
Yay, thankyou! I definitely think that when I right poems about me, people I know or seen, or past experiences, I think people here tend to relate to them more like them.
Thanks, your comments mean a lot!
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
I really like this, great
I really like this, great imagery.
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond