The Winter

Submitted by Joseph on Wed, 04/14/2010 - 14:10

waking up you see
sitting on a snow-covered tree
a cardinal, red and warm

his beak is yellow
his eyes are bright
he ruffles his feathers and takes flight

father frost blows
on your window pane
with his pattern, leaves a stain

all the trees
look like glass
but there's an emptiness

snuggled up under covers
not wanting to leave you bed
you try to get out, but jumping back in
you huddle up and sigh

you try again; you shiver
you put on your slippers
and hurry downstairs

down the stairs your dad fixes the fire
making you feel all warm inside
and outside as well

your mom is making oatmeal
it sends a happy shiver
down your spine with it's smell

and happily
the cardinal flies
onto your windowsill

Author's age when written
8
Genre

Comments

I love how this turned out Joseph!!! My favorite part was father frost and the cardinal, red and warm. So good. :) Perfect and descriptive.....

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"Sweet is the love that never knew a wound, but deeper that which died and rose again." - Mother Mary Francis

This is wonderful!! My favorite part is "on your window leaves a stain", and the "cardinal red and warm". You have a talent for descriptions. I also liked how it ended. So glad I found this!

This was excellent, Joseph! You did an AWESOME job! I really enjoyed it!

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The Holy Spirit is the quiet guest of our soul." -St. Augustine

I thought this was just SUPER perfect for your age, Joseph!! You write tremendously well and your descriptions are crisp and lovely!!

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson