Constriction

Submitted by Hannah D. on Tue, 03/04/2014 - 00:25

They tell me not to use clichés
No longer fresh as daisies;
I've reached the end of all my rope,
Blank paper drives me crazy.

They tell me to forego abstracts
Like truth and mad and sappy;
Now I'm confused, despise the rules
That've never made me happy.

"Show, don't tell!" - they order well
When they can master language;
I only say, if I had my way,
I'd use all emotions and adages.

They say it hurts a poem so
When it is forced to rhyme,
That it forces awkward wording; I say
Meaning shows in half the time.

I read of hope and truth and beauty
By Keats, Dickinson and Shelley;
Great minds think alike, do they not?
None of their poems are smelly.

Author's age when written
18
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I read the first line, then read it all aloud. This was GREAT and made me smile. But, the last line could be improved.

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

Thanks gals! The last line was meant to exemplify the awkwardness of a forced rhyme. But really, any strange phrase that ends with a word that rhymes with Shelley will work. Jelly? Belly? Deli? (Anything will be incredibly awkward, I fear, but that's kinda the point)

I like this, the last line made me laugh! I got the awkward point of it ;)

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh