I'm off the beaten track, there
I'm off without a clue.
And when you see me floundering
You'll know just what to do.
You could be my Pharisee,
Carefully walk away.
Carefully walk away, Love
Every single day.
St. Foy sees cities smiling
Amidst the pilgrim siege.
And when she slowly prompts, Dear
You'll know just what she means.
You could be my Samaritan
Carefully take my hand.
Carefully take my hand, Love -
But only if you can.
Comments
Nice
I really like the Pharisee/Samaritan contrast. And the rhyming scheme is pleasant -- it works out really well in stanzas 2 and 4, I think.
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"The idea that we should approach science without a philosophy is itself a philosophy... and a bad one, because it is self-refuting." -- Dr. Jason Lisle
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I really like this. I don't know exactly why, but I do. Thumbs up!
Wow this Is Good
WOW THIS IS GOOD!
Very good job wioth this! It was nice and short but has everything poems are supposed to have !
Two Thumbs Up.
Oh and love your profil Picture LOL
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!
Wonderful. I don't really
Wonderful. I don't really know how else to explain it...and even that doesn't seem to be the proper word...but I like this very much. :)
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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]
I liked this! It was very
I liked this! It was very sweet. It seemed like a love story in poem form lol.