This was sort of born through out a long family day that made me realize I should really carry paper and a pen so unfinished poems can't haunt my thoughts. I'd really appreciate any comments!
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Dragon
A dragon, black
Stalks my life
Lurks behind my path
Green leering eyes
Peer through trees
Watching my every move
Dark shiny scales
Glisten in light
Draw my curious eye
Crunching dry leaves
With eerie sound
Beneath long hard nails
It never speaks
Yet won’t leave
It’s waiting, for what?
My feelings build
My heart speeds
It’s behind every corner
Catch its eye
See its grin
You’ll know it then
Its name varies
All too often
Fear, Jealousy, Hate, Desire
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It was horrible!! and it just kept growing and I was like "this isn't normal!!!" Thank you so much! That means a lot! I like that part too :)!
A poem begins as a lump in the thoat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness -Robert Frost
Emilee @ http://fantasticalpaperrealm.blogspot.com/
Oooh!
I totally know what you mean, in the worst of times a poem idea hits you and there isn't a pen or piece of paper in sight, then the poem haunts you!
This was masterfully written! I love the description and writing style! Awesome!!! Loved this line:
"It never speaks
Yet won’t leave
It’s waiting, for what?"
Oh and the last line! Perfect!
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!
You have mega talent when it
You have mega talent when it comes to poetry! And I believe you've improved by leaps in bounds just in the time you've been on AP. :) A very smart idea for a poem, and I really enjoyed it. I loved the same lines Kassady did, and the ending--perfect!
A dragon, black
Stalks my life
Lurks behind my path
Green leering eyes
Peer through trees
Stalking my every move
My only suggesting would be replacing the word stalks or stalking with something else, since they are repeated so close together. :)
Also, I loved your descriptions of the dragon. It was very vivid.
:)
Its name varies
All too often
Fear, Jealousy, Hate, Desire
Wow; you caught me there. I thought you were taking a dragon literally; but it's very true. Very good job!
"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson
Thank you so much!!
I didn't even notice the stalk-stalking thing!! Thanks!! I changed the stalking to watching!
Thank you guys for the compliments, it means a ton! And actually, the original plan was a real dragon, that's why I described it so vividly! But then it sort of just wanted to be something different!
A poem begins as a lump in the thoat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness -Robert Frost
Emilee @ http://fantasticalpaperrealm.blogspot.com/
Yes, dragons are evil
A great peom. I'm sure that you won't mind, but can I use an idea from your peom? I can't quite say what it is yet, but it shall be revealed in an apricotpie post soon.
"My greatest wish for my writing is that it would point you to the Savior."
*Gasp*
Use an idea from MY poem!?!? The HORROR! Teasing, obviously! Of course! It's cool that you got an idea from it! I'll be watching for the post!
A poem begins as a lump in the thoat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness -Robert Frost
Emilee @ http://fantasticalpaperrealm.blogspot.com/
I know the feeling! Although
I know the feeling! Although more often it's with drawing, for me. I see something and go "Gah, I wish I had my sketch book!"
My favourite is: Its name varies
All too often
Fear, Jealousy, Hate, Desire
That wraps the whole poem up really well and leaves the reader completely satisfied. ;)
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
I do the same thing with
I do the same thing with drawing too! Thanks :)
A poem begins as a lump in the thoat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness -Robert Frost
Emilee @ http://fantasticalpaperrealm.blogspot.com/
Oooh!
I totally know what you mean, in the wost of times a poem idea hits you and there isn't a pen or piece of paper in sight, then the poem haunts you!
This was masterfully written! I love the description and writing style! Awesome!!! Loved this line:
"It never speaks
Yet won’t leave
It’s waiting, for what?"
Oh and the last line! Perfect!
"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!