Dripping and Unclosing

Submitted by Elizabeth on Fri, 06/04/2010 - 23:16

 

Her eye, grey, illumined in hazy light The eyebrows soft and firm, her chin rounded and smooth Her forehead, raised, fair and tall The lips simple and steady, her cheeks curved and blue   Her face, pale, glowing in the fiery bosom The features worn and gentle, her eyelids moist and low Her hair, dark, shorn and plain The neck drooped and restless, her movements guarded and slow   She in fire-lit room, she beckoned to his shadowy gloom She in embroidered throne, she collapsing in truth alone She in simple garb, she embedded with malicious shard She in youthful year, she resisting the poisonous sneer   Her glance, keen, stabbing and tearing Her eyelashes, dark, dripping and unclosing    
Author's age when written
16
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Comments

That was AmAzing Elizabeth. So descriptive and breathtaking.....beautifully done! :)

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"Sweet is the love that never knew a wound, but deeper that which died and rose again." - Mother Mary Francis

Breath taking, Elizabeth. Really stunning.

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

This is really beutiful!! Wow. I keep rereading it.
Also, it kind of reminds me of Jane Eyre for some reason... maybe because you used "unclosing", as does Charlotte Bronte. I didn't like that word before. But your poem made me change my mind!
Well anyway. Amazing. :)

Very beautiful. There's a story hiding here...maybe someone will find it.

Formerly Kestrel

Thank you all! I am sooo glad you enjoyed it!

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The Holy Spirit is the quiet guest of our soul." -St. Augustine

Beautiful, Elizabeth!  Just beautiful...I loved every minute of it. :)

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]