Lovely kisses from high circling Sweet hugs of twirling arms swirling Laughing with crinkling joy falling Blanketing smoothness light paving Silent descending bitterly lying Downward in patterns swiftly flying Upturned face receives gladly Tears of clouds dropping musically Fair hair swept about girl gaily Hands of movement flowing briskly Child gathers and tosses happily Clouds of colour arraying fairly Bare his feet wander aimlessly Path of golden rays receiving openly Eyes of joy gazing wonderingly White ornaments fill glancing beautifully Downward in patterns swiftly flying
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I love this, Elizabeth!!
I love this, Elizabeth!! It's wonderful!!
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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]
Lovely! I had to read it
Lovely! I had to read it through three times just to soak it in...
I loved the rhythm of it, and your use of adverbs added a very unique touch. My favorite line was "Downward in patterns swiftly flying"
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Brother: Your character should drive a motorcycle.
Me: He can't. He's in the wilderness.
Brother: Then make it a four-wheel-drive motorcycle!