**Ta DA! First post of the new year! :D Actually, I was hoping to post a chapter from one of my books, but as our computer is dead right now and waiting to be resurrected, I can't access my folder with all my writing in it; but hopefully that will be changed soon! So I decided to just post a poem that I wrote, by hand, and still have on paper. It's kind of one of those experimental-type poems, so any suggestions would be nice. Enjoy!**
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rainbows dance above the river,
and
splash
splash
splash
go the waves, while
cattails quiver
and breezes shiver
whistling among the pines
grasses sway and bend their backs,
while
swish
swish
swish
their stalks rumpling, with
rustling cracks
the wheat and flax
submitting to the wind
waterfalls gushing over stones,
and
plink
plink
plink
the droplets crystal, o'er
earthes bones
midst crumbling thrones
immortal water running
trees above like gentle towers,
and
creak
creak
creak
branches old crowned, with
spring-eager flowers
midst leafy bowers
green and gold all shimmering
sky above, the ageless soaring,
and
soft
soft
soft
swan feather clouds, like
ships to the mooring
sun and rain pouring
benediction on the earth
Comments
Sat, 01/09/2010 - 22:55
In reply to I enjoyed it very much. :) by Maethorwen (not verified)
oh thanks. :)
oh thanks. :)
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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]
You're welcome. Btw, can you
You're welcome. Btw, can you tell me how I can get my full Elvish name? My real name is Emily.
Random I know but I'm a huge LOTR fan.
WOW!!
Whoa! This was sooooo good! I loved the whole setup and the repeating of the words!! It gave it a soft feel. It gave me a lot of joy when I read it!!! Awesome job, Clare!!!
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The Holy Spirit is the quiet guest of our soul." -St. Augustine
Beautiful!
Beautiful!
hmm...
...this was really unique. It reminded me of a poet...but i can't remember who... :/ Anyway, it turned out very enjoyable. :)
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"Sweet is the love that never knew a wound, but deeper that which died and rose again." - Mother Mary Francis
Clare, that was beautiful! I
Clare, that was beautiful! I love the way you wrote the descending parts. It makes it really feel as if those things were alive, flowing and whistling down on earth.
My favorite verses were the ones about the water and the trees.
Well done! I'd say you should lok for a place to publish this...
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And now our hearts will beat in time/You say I am yours and you are mine...
Michelle Tumes, "There Goes My Love"
Wow, this was lovely, Clare!
Wow, this was lovely, Clare! I loved it.
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
Absolutely lovely! I'd say
Absolutely lovely! I'd say your experiement was a success!
Beautiful! My favorite part
Beautiful! My favorite part was:
"midst crumbling thrones
immortal water running."
*sigh of delight*
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Brother: Your character should drive a motorcycle.
Me: He can't. He's in the wilderness.
Brother: Then make it a four-wheel-drive motorcycle!
...
Thanks so much, everyone. :)
Maethorwen: Hello fellow huge LOTR fan! :D You can get your full Elvish name from this website (one of the best Tolkien fan websites there is): arwen-undomiel.com
Just click the button that says "elvish" and you're all set!
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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]
This is great, great stuff.
This is great, great stuff.
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief
Wow!! Perfect ending. I loved
Wow!! Perfect ending. I loved the part about the grass bending its back, I loved the "earth's bones"... And the rhyme/rhythm is unique and flowing. You totally nailed it. :)
Sun, 01/17/2010 - 17:27
In reply to Wow!! Perfect ending. I loved by Hannah W.
:)
Thanks.
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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]
I enjoyed it very much. :)
I enjoyed it very much. :)