Forevermore: A poem of Narnia

Submitted by Clare Marie on Tue, 06/03/2008 - 17:31

He is magnificent,
Brave and a leader.
Eldest in age,
His name is Peter.
His sword is bright,
His shield is red,
And the mighty wolf
He struck, quite dead.
In England a boy,
In Narnia a man.
O the deeds he wrought
In that faraway land.
With the Witch and King Miraz
He fought and he wrested.
One couldn’t kill him,
The other he bested.
Too soon he grew up,
No more could he visit
That world he loved;
He knew he would miss it.
But the one under whose
Guidance he came,
Led him to realize
That it was no game.
He would come back;
He just had to wait.
Soon he would enter
Time’s immortal gate.

Beautiful Susan,
The second oldest;
One of the best fighters
Though not the boldest.
Her arrow would always
Find its mark.
Her horn was the light
In Narnia’s dark.
Despite her advantage
O’er man and beast,
She was gentle and
Liked killing the least.
She was there when
The Great Lion was slain;
She was there when he rose
Like the sun after rain.
She was made queen
And reigned for many years.
She helped to wipe
Her kingdom’s tears.
She aided in crowning
The new king of her land:
Prince Caspian it was,
A noble young man.
Like Peter she grew too fast, and left
With the breath of the Lion.
Yet she never returned to that fairy land
Because of lipstick and nylons.

Upright and good
Is King Edmund the Just;
His skills are great,
His sword never rusts.
Yet he was the first to
Meet the false Queen.
He thought she was kind,
His sight was not keen.
“More Turkish Delight,”
Was all that he wanted.
He didn’t care that the
Faun would be hunted.
He soon realized that he
Had done wrong.
And all his great deeds
Are remembered in song.
He sailed to the world’s end with
Caspian and Lucy.
He saw many wonders with
Eustace the Goosey.
Dufflepuds and serpents
And an island of black.
Of Aslan’s protection
There was never a lack.
Soon he was too old,
Like his sister and brother.
Yet he returned to the land he
Loved like none other.

Queen Lucy the Valiant,
Though youngest of all
Was the first to answer
That Narnian call.
Almost betrayed by the
One she thought friend,
Yet she forgave, and stayed
Friends to the end.
She was with her sister
When Aslan died;
She mourned over him,
And tenderly cried.
She saw him risen,
Whole and new.
She healed many
On Aslan’s cue.
She also became queen,
And reigned long and well.
She left, but returned,
Telmar’s evil to quell.
She set the young Prince
On his high throne.
She sailed with him,
Their deeds now well-known.
Always the favorite of
The Great Lion,
He said she would come back,
And live without dying.

To stay in Narnia
Forevermore.
That was the promise
Made to the four.

Author's age when written
14
Genre
Notes

Watching the new Narnia movie, "Prince Caspain", inspired me to write about the Pevensie kids. Although this poem is based more on the books than the movies...

Comments

I enjoyed this very much! Although, obviously, the last few lines about Susan made me sad. I wonder why she would become weird like that?

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"The idea that we should approach science without a philosophy is itself a philosophy... and a bad one, because it is self-refuting." -- Dr. Jason Lisle

Thank you! Yeah, I was kinda sad writing about Susan...I don't know why she became like that. It would be cool to have been able to ask C.S. Lewis why he did what he did.

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

Next best thing is to read his letters. Our world didn't end in The Last Battle; only Narnia. So I think Susan still had a chance, if she chose to take it. If you're interested, there's about 5000 fanfictions about her. ;)

“Fairy Tales are more than true; not because they tell us that dragons exist, but because they tell us that dragons can be beaten.” - G.K. Chesterton

Really? 5000? I should read some of those. I always like to find out what happens after the story. :) I think Susan had a chance, too; so do alot of Narnia fans, I believe. I was kinda thinking of sticking that fact in the poem, but it just didn't fit! Thanks for the comment.

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

Excellent poem. I really like it.

I think you'll find, if you read more of Lewis' letters and writings, that Susan is left with lots of hope, and the promise that she to can return to Narnia if she can find Aslan in her own world. :-)

Thank you for sharing this poem!

Thank you! And thanks for the input, I'll be sure to read some of Lewis' writings.

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

Wow you did a pretty good job! Now i wanna watch the second one (prince caspian movie)lol.

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The Truth will set you free.

Thanks!! I liked the second movie alot, better than the first, actually. :)

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

Cool.. yeah i haven't seen it yet.. (the second i mean!)

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The Truth will set you free.

Wonderful poem, Clare.

About the Susan leaving Narnia... I think in some ways it shows that some of us can fall away. Although we may not always see it, it's a reality in life...
but on the bright side... there are some of us who stay loyal and make it through to perfect golden streets. :)

You're right; it is rather a portrayal of the weakness of humanity. Yet there is always the hope of redemption...

Thank you for the comment. I'm glad you liked my poem!! :)

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

I love this poem! You did an awesome job with it!
Although...you liked the second movie better? I really didn't like it! :0( I was looking forward to it so much and I walked away from it going blah. I think my biggest gripe was Peter. I won't give away what happens for everyone who hasn't seen the movie...but Clare you probably know what I'm talking about. And the Susan/Caspian thing. Blegh.
But, I'm getting off the subject....the poem was totally sweet! I think it's so cool we have a ton of LOTR and Narnia fans around here!

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And now our hearts will beat in time/You say I am yours and you are mine...
Michelle Tumes, "There Goes My Love"

Hey Clare!
This is a great poem! Between this and "The Thoughts of Bilbo Baggins" I am really loving your descriptions. :) You should do one on Mr. Darcy from Pride and Prejudice!!! I <3 Mr. Darcy sorry about that.
Anyway, great poem.

(And I kind of agree with Heather even though I liked PC better than she did.)

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Heather and Anna: Thank you! I'm so glad you both liked the poem; I enjoyed writing it.

Yeah, I did like the second movie better. I don't know, there was just something about it that made me enjoy it more! I went to see it expecting it to have downers, so I guess they didn't effect me so much as they could have. But I was still really disappointed in some parts.

Heather: I totally agree with you: that Susan/Caspian thing was BAD!!! Thumbs way down! That was one major downfall in the movie. But if you want my full opinion, look on your most recent essay and you'll see it. Although it's kinda long...

Anna: Maybe I should write a poem on Mr. Darcy, or Elizabeth, or both. That's a good idea. It would be really fun to do. :)

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

 That was wonderful! I loved it so much I could print it out and  hang it on the wall To memerise. Sorry my spelling is not the best.... That was very good

Truely GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Write On!

poems were really AWSOME!!!!!!! so me and a friend are gonna write a parody book  about our fav books and movies (narnia,harry.p,pride &pred)and some we do'nt like(twlight, justin beiber) can we use the edmund poem  its not gonna be pulished or anything but i'd like to put names in our book so please respond SOOOOOOOOOOON!!!!!!!!                                              

 

 

 

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