Forever

Submitted by Gina I. on Wed, 02/15/2017 - 05:54

Forever is what we promise
Forever is how we'll stay
No matter what tries to harm us
Nothing will keep us away
Forever is what keeps us young
But our time together is never long
As forever slips through our hands
Like infinite grains of sand
Soon we must learn to say goodbye
As the sun falls from the proverbial sky
And the stars loose their grip on space
We each will find our rightful place

As forever ends, right on time

Author's age when written
17
Genre
Poetry

Comments

Madalyn Clare

Fri, 02/17/2017 - 17:28

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Oh, that last line is perfection! The flow of this poem is really well paced, and I love your wording. Bravo!

Introverts unite!
Separately!
From the comfort of your own homes!

Lucy Anne

Fri, 02/17/2017 - 17:54

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Just want to say...
You did a lovely job writing this. I really like this. The flow, and the forever. How you repeated it and wasn't predictable -- you surprised and impressed me.
It reminded me of a friendship, and going through change - it had the perfect rhythm (especially with how "proverbial sky" was put) that fit with the mood.
Loved the last few lines:
"And the stars loose their grip on space
We each will find our rightful place

As forever ends, right on time"

--meaning how the world may fall apart, but it will still be in God's time...and that last line--"right on time"was the best way you could end this.

Just reading this poem brings so many different memories in my own life--and that's what I like the most about it.
This is a wonderful poem.

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson