Hush, Naomi;
The sparrow sings
Beyond the twisted wire
Last night
His small hand
Held your finger,
His glassy brown eyes
Held yours
When they took him,
They left his empty blanket
In your hand:
It is cold
And still
You sit beside the door
And watch
The wood ants file
Slowly by
And hear the sparrow sing
Beyond the wire
Hush, Naomi.
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Who or what is Sobibor? I
Who or what is Sobibor? I like the rythym and the "Hush, Naomi" part, but I don't understand it.
"Wait a minute. Wait a minute, I am just about to be brilliant." - Cosmo, from Singing In The Rain
"I always wonder why birds stay in the same place when they can fly anywhere on the earth. Then I ask myself the same question." - Harun Yahya
[I had to look up Sobibor
[I had to look up Sobibor too. :P]
This is really, really, really good.
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"Sing as if no one is listening;
Dance like no one is watching;
Live as if you will die tomorrow;
Love like it will never hurt."
-Old Irish Saying
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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]
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That's so sad, Ezra.
But it's beautiful at the same time.
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“The venerable dead are waiting in my library to entertain me and relieve me from the nonsense of surviving mortals.”
- Samuel Davies
Indeed
I can only echo Kyleigh's Sentiments.
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"The idea that we should approach science without a philosophy is itself a philosophy... and a bad one, because it is self-refuting." -- Dr. Jason Lisle
... :.( Why must you make me
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Why must you make me cry?
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Chaos.
Panic.
Disorder.
My work here is done.
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief
exquisite
Without knowing what Sobibor was, the image pulsing in my mind was what it actually is.
I can't even speak how sad this is. You can see and feel the tenderness of the boy. I like the sparsity of it; the emotion is communicated VERY, very well, and actually, with that sparsity, ironically, the emotion seems more filling - substantive. The silence of it bothers me more than a longer lament could.
Beautiful.
Beautiful. At last, someone
Beautiful. At last, someone who understands that you don't have to go on and on where a few whispered words would do!
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Words are at their highest when they are used as a window through which we can see God.
~ Paul David Tripp
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Brother: Your character should drive a motorcycle.
Me: He can't. He's in the wilderness.
Brother: Then make it a four-wheel-drive motorcycle!
Thanks all. I didn't know
Thanks all.
I didn't know what Sobibor was either until I saw the movie "Escape from Sobibor" - which started the thought behind this poem. If you watch the movie, you will probably be able to pick out which character inspired this, although I changed things around a little.
BTW: sorry, Anna.
"There are no great men of God. There are only pitiful, sorry men whose God is great beyond measure." - Paul Washer [originally Jonathan Edwards]
Thanks all. I didn't know
Thanks all.
I didn't know what Sobibor was either until I saw the movie "Escape from Sobibor" - which started the thought behind this poem. If you watch the movie, you will probably be able to pick out which character inspired this, although I changed things around a little.
BTW: sorry, Anna.
"There are no great men of God. There are only pitiful, sorry men whose God is great beyond measure." - Paul Washer [originally Jonathan Edwards]
Was the character's name
Was the character's name Naomi? I was just trying to guess why that was the name you chose - if there was any significance behind it. At first I thought of the verse, "Naomi weeping for her children, because they are no more..." but then I remembered, oh, wait, that was Rachel.
Wed, 04/08/2009 - 03:44
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Simply heartbreakingly
Simply heartbreakingly beautiful.
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Seen on a billboard advertising
a Septic Tank Company:
"We're #1
in the #2 business."
"Sometimes even to live is courage."
-Seneca
Sun, 04/19/2009 - 23:12
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Thanks again for the
Thanks again for the comments, all.
Sarah: I don't even remember if Naomi was the name of the character in the movie, but is seemed most appropriate when I began the poem.
"There are no great men of God. There are only pitiful, sorry men whose God is great beyond measure." - Paul Washer [originally Jonathan Edwards]
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Wow, this is very intense, but very beautiful. I like the simplicity of it.
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"We have been created for greater things. Why stoop down to things that will spoil the beauty of our hearts?" ~Mother Theresa
Great image, Ezra, as
Great image, Ezra, as always. Imagery and subtelty seem to be your two strengths as a poet. THis piece blew me away, tho. It was great. thanks
Sad...good though. I had an
Sad...good though.
I had an idea of what it was about when you said something about twisted wire, then I looked it up.
"I always bite my flesh when I'm thinking." Alecia
BTW...
I watched Escape from Sobibor the other day. It was on Youtube, and I was bored.
Anyway... wow. I'm still processing it all. But it was kinda odd, because it didn't have nearly the same effect on me as Hotel Rwanda. Hotel Rwanda was so much worse, even though they were both similar events.
I wasn't able to pick out the character, but then I wasn't really looking, and I can't usually make connections like that.
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“The venerable dead are waiting in my library to entertain me and relieve me from the nonsense of surviving mortals.”
- Samuel Davies
It was the girl who smuggled
It was the girl who smuggled her baby into the sewing shop with her only to be descovered by the SS. BTW, one of the SS guards from Sobibor is now on trial for several thousand counts of accessory to murder and war crimes. He had been working in a factory in Detroit for the past fifty years or so.
"There are no great men of God. There are only pitiful, sorry men whose God is great beyond measure." - Paul Washer [originally Jonathan Edwards]
OK
Ok, now I see the connection. Somehow in my mind the baby was a girl, so it didn't connect.
Thanks for explaining. :)
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“The venerable dead are waiting in my library to entertain me and relieve me from the nonsense of surviving mortals.”
- Samuel Davies
You've got the minimalistic
You've got the minimalistic style down well here. I had to look up Sobibor, which helped me understand it better. This was very good, thank you.