I adore poetry, But I don't even pretend to be good at writing it! But anyway here's a lil' diddy! I'd appreciate any feedback!

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Eyes. 

When you look in my eyes,

Can you tell that I cry? 

Do you see all of lifes' pain,

Fall off me like it's rain. 

Do you wonder if I smile,

as without you a I walk another mile. 

Do your eyes betray you? 

The way I know that mine do...