Child of Promise

Submitted by Emilee on Sun, 12/30/2012 - 19:35

A late Christmas poem! Comments make my day :)
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Child of Promise

Tiny body wrapped in rags
New pink flesh poked with hay
Innocent baby
My newborn messiah

Welcomed by a lowing cow
Announced by a choir of angels
Desolate child
The sacrificial lamb

Two frightened parents all alone
Thoughts and dreams, vows to keep
Firstborn son
Prince of Peace

Future grim, yet so bright
Prophesied pain and indescribable love
Infant King
God of all

Author's age when written
17
Genre

Comments

I really liked the way this poem is written and think it is one of your best. This is just my opinion and others might not see a problem with it, but '' infant babe'' sounds redundant to me. I especially liked the third stanza.

This is AWESOME. Well done. And Infant King sounds way better. :D I can't point out which bit I liked the most; they're all good!

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh