he tries to touch me
but I shrink away
his eyes are watching
accosting me
my skin shudders
as he spits rhymes
and sweet words to the girl
on my left
she’s laughing
but she doesn’t know
what he did
last night
he does not have
good intentions
I don’t know
how to tell him
to back off
Comments
Thank you, I appreciate it!
Thank you, I appreciate it!
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
:)
I really super duper enjoyed this. It was so vivid and I caught the exact feeling you described, no, I FELT everything you described. Really well done, Erin!
Off-topic--Did you have a birthday or have I not taken notice of the 'Age' section, or have I simply forgotten when your birthday was?!
Hope college is going well for you!
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
Thank you! College is great.
Thank you! College is great. I had a birthday in September. :)
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
Wow, this is really good,
Wow, this is really good, Erin. And so powerful. I practically just wanted to recoil reading about this person. The way you use words here is masterful. It's simple, but not overly so. It's not cluttered with unnecessary, long, wordy stanzas--not that your poems are, ever, but still. You just know how to write
my skin shudders
as he spits rhymes
Fabulous use of spits there. It's adds to the ick-factor of this character, and my skin shudders is also a favorite. Very potent.