Wow, this is kinda depressing. It sounds better when you're listening to an AMAZING song called Gravity by Sara Bareilles. This was inspired from a dance on So You Think You Can Dance (Mia Michaels' contemporary routine, danced by Kayla and Kupono). They danced it to Gravity, and it is beautiful. So anyhow, constructive critisism is definitely welcome!!!!
Trapped, captured
Dancing at the tips of your cruel fingers
I am your marionette
You are the puppet master
You want me
Because I've lost strength
You don't care about me
You want power
Why do I stay?
I don't know
All you do is drag me down
But something always pulls me back
You wait, calm as March wind
I always run back
Your arm is forever ready for me
Broken me
You're an addiction
I love you
I hate you
But I can't leave
Addiction
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I dunno.......I heard that
I dunno.......I heard that Gravity song and saw that dance and felt like writing it. Believe me, I'm not sad!!! :-D
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
It is truly amazing how music
It is truly amazing how music moves us. Just the way God made it. Really, how could music evolve like that? This actally made me laugh. How could you love some one, yet hate them? I guess because they're an addiction
Nate-Dude
Haha, I'm glad it wasn't
Haha, I'm glad it wasn't totally depressing ;-)
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
Tue, 07/14/2009 - 04:24
In reply to It is truly amazing how music by I am Nate-Dude
You hate that you love them,
Nate-Dude: You hate that you love them, because you love the addiction, but you hate that you need it to survive. That's the way it is for me anyway.
"I always wonder why birds stay in the same place when they can fly anywhere on the earth. Then I ask myself the same question." - Harun Yahya
Tue, 07/14/2009 - 04:37
In reply to You hate that you love them, by Bridget
Thanks Bridget. I hate
Thanks Bridget. I hate Addictions too. Ap is kinda one of them. But I don't hate AP at all!!!
Nate-Dude
"How could you love some one,
"How could you love some one, yet hate them? I guess because they're an addiction"
I have to agree with Nate on this one. Not just the person, but love or loving someone, can be an addiction.
Erin, I like your succintness and brevity, which I feel paints a rather brilliant picture of the emotions that accompany 'addiction'.
Not depressing, but stark and truthful. I like that. :}
Thank you :-)
Thank you :-)
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
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This was pretty good! depressing, that's fine! lol. So true about the whole loving and hating. lol. That's probably the most commented thing on your poem...;) anyways, good job!
~Paula
Thanks :-D
Thanks :-D
"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond
I liked it! :)
I saw that dance too...and the song...oh my goodness, the song was amazing! So this fits perfectly with it.
(You're probably wondering why I'm commenting a year after it was published...I go scrolling through old poems and stories on AP just for fun! hehe)
You're right
This is depressing. Why'd you write it?
Formerly Kestrel