Sea so Deep

Submitted by Bernadette on Wed, 07/16/2008 - 20:51

The night so fair
Wind so cool
Deep waves of sea
Flow ever on

The stars glimmer
Spreading brightness
On deep blue sea
Reflects
Fair moon
Above the sea

The sky, the sea
Deep blue
Rushing sound
Of waves
Gusting
Wind

The wave’s lapping shore
Tide pulls in
As sun rises
Over peaks
Of blue seas
Shall endure the morn.

Author's age when written
10
Genre

Comments

Very Nice! Beautifuly written!!!!!!!! I love the way the poem flows and your descriptions.

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The Holy Spirit is the quiet guest of our soul." -St. Augustine

Well, if you've read anything of mine you'd know how much I love water, rain, the sea, and anything dealing with water! I really like this!!!!!!!

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Ricky was L but he has the flu,
Lizzie was O but she homework to do,
Mitchell was E but probably got lost on the way,
So I'm all of love that could make it today.
-Shel Silverstien

Good job! I love the descriptions and the meter of the poem.
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Talent and persistence are secrets...those who zero in on it are the ones who succeed~Judith Mackey

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And now our hearts will beat in time/You say I am yours and you are mine...
Michelle Tumes, "There Goes My Love"

I love this! It was beautiful. You did a wonderful job. :) It makes me ache even more to be at the ocean, though!

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"We have been created for greater things. Why stoop down to things that will spoil the beauty of our hearts?" ~Mother Theresa

Bernadette,
You are getting to be a really good writer. I love this poem...

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"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like; and I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve." -Bilbo Baggins [The Lord of the Rings]

This is beautiful.

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

I really like this, Bernadette. I'm at the beach right now, and I was playing a bit in the ocean, but it was really cold. Keep up the good work!