Oh Lord my God I stand right here,
Do cleanse me now and draw me near.
I pray you'd purify my soul,
Please sanctify and make me whole.
Amazing Lord, oh wondrous God,
To Thee all glory and all laud.
Your mercy sav'd me from my sin.
A gift of grace given to men.
All glory be to Thee dear Lord.
Teach me to wield your holy sword,
Help me instruct and edify
Your image Lord to magnify.
Amazing Lord, oh wondrous God,
To Thee all glory and all laud.
You give me grace Your name to preach,
And strength You give for me to teach.
I'm broken Lord, You make me stand,
A man of God led by Your hand.
Guide me along Your paths prepared
And let me never be ensnared
Amazing Lord, oh wondrous God,
To Thee all glory and all laud.
Let every man live all his days
With works that would Your name give praise!
Came up with the first verse of this about a month ago while singing the benediction at work; so this goes to the tune of the Old Hundredth. Finally sat down today and wrote up the rest. I think this is the first actual legitimate poem I have written. I hope you enjoy it and are encouraged.
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Thanks!
Thank you Megan. I know I haven't been around; I haven't been here for a couple months, and hadn't posted for almost a year. I hope to change the pattern. :)
I sort of had a similar feeling about that line, but it's eight syllables. I'll try to figure something out to fix its flow.
And, yes, the Doxology, not the benediction, that's what I meant. :P
"My greatest wish for my writing is that it would point you to the Savior."
:)
I'm sure that this is a prayer your heart will be singing very often. :)
Lovely poem. I was so happy to see that you had posted it.
I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.
Fixed?
Thanks Damaris!
Ok, I fixed it (hopefully). Does that work?
"My greatest wish for my writing is that it would point you to the Savior."
Yes! It flows very nicely. I
Yes! It flows very nicely. I like it.
I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.
I like this a lot! Enjoyed
I like this a lot! Enjoyed and encouraged by it. : ) I didn't catch any rhythm glitch, but I can say that at least now, it flows very nicely.
"first actual legitimate poem"
Hey Arthur! Glad you posted :)
I think this is very legitimate indeed!
I really enjoyed the whole flow of the poem, and your rhyming was on point. There is sometimes rhyming in a poem and it sounds terrible, but this was great!
Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh
Thanks.
Well thank you. Y'all are very encouraging.
"My greatest wish for my writing is that it would point you to the Savior."
...welcome back?
Wow....not bad. :) Pretty good. "Take me broken and make me stand," - this throws off the rhythm. Maybe "take me broken; make me stand,"
I sang the whole thing to the Doxology in order to read it, but at first kept starting to sing it with "Oh Lord my God...when I in awesome wonder" haha.
This is a beautiful prayer.
"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson