Missin’ You, Girlie

Submitted by Anna on Mon, 10/10/2011 - 19:42

“What’s your girl like, then?”
“Eh? Wot?”
“That letter you’re writin’. Go on, tell us what she’s like.”
“Aw, my lady, she’s smashin’. Mad, too.”
“Mad? How mad? Does she throw pans and ‘oller?”
“Nah, mad about flowers. An’ clothes. An’ flowers on clothes. She paints roses on ‘er stockin’s and ties wreaths in her cloudy red ‘air…”
“An’ by cloudy, you mean…”
“Sticks out in waves every which way. Ain’t ever lied flat, s’far’s I can remember. Gives kisses of its own, it does.”
“Sounds… strikin’.”
“Bold, to be sure. She only wears shoes wiv ribbons, and the patterns on ‘er skirts—Good grief! Rabbits and carrots ‘oppin’ on the ‘em, and let me tell you, carrots don’t ‘op so easy. If it ain’t critters, it’s checkers or fields or stripes or spots or more daisies an’ tulips. You’d not believe the colors.”
“I think you’re right on that, mate. Another drink?”
“No thanks, gotta be sober to write ‘er. Elsewhys, the love wouldn’t come through.”
“Er… wot?”
“The love. You gotta put love in a letter to please ‘er. Always. To please me, too, really. So far I’ve got: ‘Missin’ you, girlie. Still love you. Wish your pretty songbird wings could bring you ‘ere. Get that bonfire ready for the end of this idjit’s war.’ Do you think she’ll like it?”
“You tell me. What’s that about a bonfire mean?”
“Oh, that. We agreed to do it first thing I come ‘ome.”
“Roast chestnuts?”
“Burn the letters—an’ start talkin’.”

Exercise inspired by Mary Engelbreit’s Always.
http://4.bp.blogspot.com/-s3JawZIlFyU/TVm9ZEkEqPI/AAAAAAAABXk/Rja9IYAirhI/s1600/ME\%2BAlways\%2BHeart.JPG

Author's age when written
16
Genre
Fiction
Tags
humor
letters
romance
dialogue
epistolary

Comments

Laura Elizabeth

Mon, 10/10/2011 - 20:20

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 That was really sweet and epic! I got the picture in my mind of a proper British gentleman and an English gardener, stuck together in a trench :D I loved that last part:

"Rost chestnuts?"
"Burn the letters-an' start talkin'."

I also like how it was all dialogue. Very unique.

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Madeline

Mon, 10/10/2011 - 21:33

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I myself pictured these two men at some type of bar...stuck in a warzone, with him penning the letter and a fellow soldier sitting next to him. This was sweet and I LOVED the last line! 

“Burn the letters—an’ start talkin’.”

Another lovely work, Anna! :D

Kyleigh

Tue, 10/11/2011 - 08:35

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I love love love the ending - "burn the letters and start talking." (Though I'm a packrat when it comes to letters and wouldn't get rid of them). 

And the story fits the picture very well. 

James

Wed, 10/12/2011 - 03:36

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And dare I say, the man writing the letter seems to have the male equivelant of your personality?

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Anna

Sat, 10/15/2011 - 23:32

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I'm glad the last line and the accents were such a hit! I used to look through a book of those illustrations and make up stories. Now I've actually donr it!

@James: Wot? You're off your trolley - wot?

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Anna

Thu, 11/13/2014 - 05:17

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It's been awhile since I've looked at this piece, but I'm still quite fond of it, so I'm glad you liked it! :)

I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. --The Book Thief

Kassady

Thu, 10/13/2011 - 14:57

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LOL!

I agree! The end was sweet, and made me smile!

This was very simple, and very good!

I liked it through and through!!!! I'd I liked the way  they talked! LOL! His girl sounds very.... Homeschoolerish! LOL! :P

Write on!

"Here's looking at you, Kid"
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Write On!

Lucy Anne

Thu, 11/13/2014 - 16:03

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I just wanted to say that I really love this too. I think I read it a long time ago, but then I read it today and I really, really love it.

And you need to post again.

"It is not the length of life, but the depth of life." Ralph Waldo Emerson

E

Thu, 11/13/2014 - 17:45

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Just as adorable now as it was 3 years ago.
And YES, please post again. :)

"You were not meant to fit into a shallow box built by someone else." -J. Raymond

Maddi

Thu, 11/13/2014 - 20:25

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I also read this ages ago and didn't comment...ah, the laziness of me!
I just wanted to say this is so cute and lovely and just so different and the last line is wonderful and if I go on longer I'm just repeat everyone else all over again. Love it!

Goodbye? Oh no, please. Can’t we just go back to page one and start all over again?” – Winnie The Pooh